Feedback- Schlubalybub's "As Yet Unnamed"

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I've put the second chapter up if anyone's interested. I'd be happy to read and take into consideration any feedback, bad or good. Thanks to all of you who have already read the first chapter

I'm a bit confused on why its so short and is it about magic? cuz i think "J" should be james potter right?

no- it's just a story, its nothing to do with Harry Potter, or even magic

Yay! You've put another chapter up!

Yeah, it was one I'd posted on another site, but forgotten to do it here