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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

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INT-BOYS DORMITORY/GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

The scene cuts to a shot of the bottle and pans back to see Harry looking at it

HARRY
Well, here goes.

He takes a little sip out of it.

HERMIONE
What does it feel like?

The screen gets this little haze over it showing that the potion is working.

HARRY
Excellent! Right…I’m going down to Hagrids!

HERMIONE AND RON
What!

HERMIONE
You’ve got to go and see Slughorn!

HARRY
No, I’m going to Hagrids, I’ve got a good feeling about going to Hagrids!

He grabs his invisibility cloak and puts it on. He proceeds to walk down the stairs as Hermione and Ron follow. Harry walks out of the door and we see Lavender standing there as Hermione and Ron come out of the door.

LAVENDER
What are you doing up there with her!

We see Harry walk towards the portrait hole and Ginny and Dean come throw. He walks past them and brushes lightly against Ginny.

GINNY
Don’t push me, please, Dean! You’re always doing that, I can get through perfectly well on my own…

EXT. HOGWARTS GROUNDS-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

Harry is now outside walking towards Hagids and we see Slughorn walking towards him. Harry smiles and simply takes off the Cloak and runs towards him.

SLUGHORN
Merlin’s beard! Harry, how did you get out of the castle?

HARRY
Filch must’ve forgotten to lock the doors.

SLUGHORN
Why are you out here?

HARRY
You see sir, it’s Hagrid, he’s pretty upset. But you won’t tell anyone, Professor? I don’t want trouble for him…

SLUGHORN
Well I can’t promise that, but I know that Dumbledore trusts Hagrid to the hilt.

HARRY
Well, it’s this giant spider, he’s had it for years, it lived in the forest and could talk and everything. It died last night, and he wants company while he buries it and I said I’d go.

SLUGHORN
I heard rumors there were acromantulas in the forest. And their venom is very valuable indeed, and the creature just died, seems like an awful waste not to collect it.

HARRY
Well, if you wanted to come, Professor, Hagrid would probably be really pleased.

Harry smiles as he see’s the look of excitement in Slughorns eyes and the scene cuts to…

INT. HAGRIDS HUT-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

HAGRID
I had him from an egg, yeh know. Thank ye for coming out tonight.

SLUGHORN
No problem Hagrid, it’s our pleasure.
(We see him turn around and pull out the bottle full of poison.)
It was my pleasure.
(He chuckles and puts it back in his pocket.)

HAGRID
Do you’ wan anything to drink?

SLUGHORN
Why…yes…

INT. HAGRID HUT-LATER THAT NIGHT

Hagrid and Slughorn hit mugs together sloppily. Its apparent they’ve been drinking for quite some time now.

HAGRID
I’d like to…make a toast..Harry Potter!

SLUGHORN
Yes, indeed! Parry Otter, the Chosen Boy Who…well…
(He starts to sing)
And Odo the hero, they bore him back home. To the place that he’d known as a lad….

HAGRID
The good die young…me dad was no age ter go…nor were yer mum an’ dad Harry…terrible thing.

SLUGHORN
Sorry, can’t carry a tune to save my life.

HARRY
Hagrid wasn’t talking about your singing; he was talking about my mum and dad dying.

SLUGHORN
Oh, terrible. I don’t suppose you remember it, Harry?

HARRY
No, I was only one when they died. My dad died first, did you know that?

SLUGHORN
I…I didn’t.

HARRY
Yeah, Voldemort murdered him and then stepped over his body towards my mum. He told her to get out of the way. He told her she needn’t have died, he only wanted me. She could have run.

SLUGHORN
Oh dear, that’s awful…

HARRY
It is, isn’t it! She didn’t move, dad was already dead, but she didn’t want me to go too. She tried to plead with him…but he just laughed…

SLUGHORN
That’s enough! Really, my dear boy, I’m an old man…I don’t need to hear…

HARRY
I forgot, you liked her, didn’t you.

SLUGHORN
Liked her? I don’t imagine anyone who met her wouldn’t have liked her….

HARRY
But you won’t help her son. She gave me her life, but you won’t give me a memory.

SLUGHORN
(His eyes filled with tears.)
Don’t say that…if it were to help you, of course…but no purpose can be served.

HARRY
It can. I am the Chosen One. I have to kill him. I need that memory.

SLUGHORN
You are the Chosen One?

HARRY
Of course I am.

SLUGHORN
You’re asking a great deal…to aid you in your attempt to destroy…

HARRY
You don’t want to get rid of the wizard who killed Lily Evans?

SLUGHORN
OF course I do Harry, but….

HARRY
You’re scared he’ll find out you helped me? Be brave like my mother, Professor.

SLUGHORN
I am not proud of what that memory shows…I think I may have done great damage that day.

HARRY
You’d cancel out anything you did by giving me that memory. It would be a very brave and noble thing to do.

Slughorn stares at Harry for a second and the camera zoom’s in on Harry’s eyes. Slughorn then pulls his wand out. He places the tip of his wand to his head and pulls out the long threads of the memory and places it into a bottle and corks it. He hands it to Harry.

HARRY
Thank you very much, Professor.

SLUGHORN
You’re a good boy, and you’ve got her eyes…just don’t think too badly of me once you’ve seen it.

(He yawns and then lays back and falls asleep.)

INT. DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-LATER THAT NIGHT

The spell vision is gone as Hary knocks on Dumbledore’s office door

DUMBLEDORE
Enter!
(Harry walks in)
Good gracious Harry, to what do I owe this very late pleasure?

HARRY
Sir, I’ve got the memory from Slughorn.
(He pulls it out and shows it to him.)

DUMBLEDORE
Spectacular Harry! Very well done indeed! I knew you could do it!
(He walks up to Harry and takes the bottle and walks over to the Pensive.)
And finally, we shall see.

He pours it into the pensive and we see Dumbledore smile at Harry. We now see Harry and Dumbledore standing in the same room where Tom Riddle and Slughorn was in the earlier memory.

INT-SLUGHORNS OFFICE-NIGHT (20? YEARS AGO)

SLUGHORN
Thank you for the pineapple, by the way, you’re quite right, it is my favorite. I confidently expect you to rise to the Minister of Magic within twelve years!

TOM
I don’t know that politics would suit me sir.

SLUGHORN
Nonsense! You’ll go far Tom, I’ve never been wrong about a student yet!
(Tom looks over at his friends and they all smile.)
Good gracious, is it that time already? You’d better get going boys, or we’ll all be in trouble. Lestrange, I want your essay by tomorrow or it’s detention. Same goes for you, Avery.

Everyone leaves except Tom.

SLUGHORN
What is it Tom, you don’t want to be caught out of bed.

TOM
Sir I wanted to ask you something.

SLUGHORN
Ask away, m’boy!

TOM
I wondered, sir, what you know about…Horcruxes?

SLUGHORN
Project for Defense Against the Dark Arts, is it?

TOM
Not exactly sir, I came across the term while reading and I didn’t fully understand it.

SLUGHORN
You’d be hard pushed to find a book at Hogwarts that’ll give you details on Horcruxes. That’s very Dark stuff Tom.

TOM
You obviously know all about them, I mean a wizard like you. If you can’t tell me, I’d understand. I just knew if anyone could tell me, you could.

SLUGHORN
Well, it can’t hurt to give you an overview. A Horcrux is the word used for an object in which a person has concealed part of their soul.

TOM
I don’t quite understand how that works, though, sir.

SLUGHORN
Well, you split your soul, you see. And hide part of it in an object outside the body. Then, even if one’s body is attacked or destroyed, one cannot die, for part of their soul remains earthbound and undamaged. Few would want this however Tom, death would be preferable.

TOM
How do you split your soul?

SLUGHORN
By an act of evil, the supreme act of evil. By committing murder. Killing rips the soul apart. The wizard intent upon creating a Horcrux would use the damage to his advantage: He would encase the torn portion…

TOM
Encase? But how…

SLUGHORN
There is a spell, do not ask me, I don’t know. Do I look as though I have tried it?

TOM
No sir, I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to offend you.

SLUGHORN
Not offended Tom, it’s natural to feel curiousity about these things.

TOM
Sir, what I want to know is, will one Horcrux be much use? Can you only split your soul once? Wouldn’t it be better, make you stronger, to have your soul in more pieces, isn’t seven the most powerful magical number?

SLUGHORN
Merlin’s beard, Tom! Seven! Isn’t it bad enough to think of killing one person? In any case, it’s bad enough to divide the soul…but to rip it into seven pieces…this is all hypothetical, what we’re discussing isn’t it? All academic…

TOM
Yes, of course.

SLUGHORN
Keep it quiet, what I’ve told you. It’s a banned subject in Hogwarts…Dumbledore’s particularly fierce about it!

TOM
I won’t say a word sir.

He smiles and we see Dumbledore grab Harry’s shoulder and there’s a flash and they’re back in Dumbledore’s office.

INT. DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-NIGHT (PRESENT DAY)

DUMBLEDORE
Do you understand the significance of what we just saw Harry? Tom Riddle was doing all he could to find out how to make himself immortal.

HARRY
And do you think he succeeded sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, Harry. As far as I know the most someone has split their souls was two. Four years ago I received something that gave me proof that he’d split his soul.

HARRY
What was it?

DUMBLEDORE
The diary, Tom Riddle’s diary, that you destroyed your second year.

There’s a quick flashback of Harry stabbing the diary with the baskalisk fang in Chamber of Secrets.

HARRY

Tha…That was a Horcrux sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, and now thanks to that memory we are closer to finishing off Lord Voldemort. Seven, yes, I think the idea of a seven part soul would greatly appeal to him.

HARRY
He made seven Horcruxes? But they could be anywhere….

DUMBLEDORE
I’m glad to see you appreciate the magnitude of the problem. But it’s not seven Harry, it’s six, the final part is still within him.

HARRY
How are we supposed to find them?

DUMBLEDORE
Well you’ve destroyed one….and I’ve destroyed another…
(he raises his blackened hand into view.)
The ring, Marvolo’s ring. And a terrible curse there was upon it too. Had it not been for my own predigious skills, and for Professor Snapes timely action when I returned to Hogwarts, I might not have lived to tell the tale.

HARRY
So they can be in anything?

DUMBLEDORE
Voldermort wouldn’t put his soul in just anything. No, he would put it into objects worthy of honor. The diary was proof that he was Heir of Slytherian.

HARRY
Do you think you know what the others are?

DUMBLEDORE
I can only guess. I have been going back through his past to see if I can find evidence that great artifacts have disappeared…

HARRY
The locket! Hufflepuff’s cup!

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, Harry. They would make three and four. I’m guessing he set out to track down objects owned by Gryffindor or Ravenclaw. Four objects from the four founders. I’m also thinking that his snake Nagina holds another piece.

HARRY
So the diary’s gone, the ring’s gone. The cup, the locket, the snake, and you think that there might be a Horcrux that was once Ravenclaw’s or Gryffindor’s?

DUMBLEDORE
Accurate summary Harry.

HARRY
So is that why you’ve been leaving school sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, I have been looking for a very long time. I may be close to finding another one.

HARRY
And if you do can I come with you and help get rid of it?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, I think so.

HARRY
(Shocked)
I can?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, Harry. I think you have earned the right.

HARRY
So if all of his Horcruxes are destroyed, Voldemort could be killed?

DUMBLEDORE
I think so Harry, yes. Without them he will be a mortal man with a maimed and diminished soul. Don’t forget however, as damaged as his soul is, his magical powers still remain intact. It will take uncommon skill and power to kill him.

HARRY
But I haven’t got uncommon skill and power.

DUMBLEDORE
You have a power that Voldemort never had. You can…

HARRY
Love, I know. Big deal!

DUMBLEDORE
Big deal? Do you not understand how unusual you are? By attempting to kill you Voldemort singled you out, because of him you’re able to see into his thoughts, ambitions, the snakelike language in which he gives orders, and yet, despite this you have never been seduced by the Dark Arts! Love, so strong a word, and I wish you would understand just how important it is that you have it. You are protected by this ability, in spite of all you’ve been through you’ve remained pure at heart.

HARRY
It all comes down to the same thing doesn’t it sir? I’ve got to try and kill him or…

DUMBLEDORE
Got to? Of course you’ve got to! Because you will never rest until you’ve tried. Imagine if you hadn’t of heard the prophecy Harry, how would you feel about Voldemort now?

HARRY
I’d want him finished….and I’d want to do it.

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

I've been reading this thread and it's replies for ages now and think its a great idea to script our own versions of we'd like the fims to be like. I've just started my own version of a script for Order of the Phoenix as no-one else in this thread seems to be doing that book, and hope to get the first part of it up here soon. :)

Lupin_89

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

My next HBP stuff will be from the Burrow through the Hogwarts Express, but since I'm a bit stuck with rewrites there, I figured this would be a good time to post my first DH scene. Imperfect, of course, but I'm fairly happy with it.

INT. MALFOY MANOR - DRAWING ROOM

FADE IN

An apparently unconscious figure, the firelight in the room too dim for a face to be visible, rotates upside down in midair, as if controlled by invisible ropes. Pan left and down slightly, across a conference table packed with DEATH EATERS, including BELLATRIX LESTRANGE (gazing pleasurably at the bound figure above), NARCISSA MALFOY (looking determinedly away from the prisoner), and PETER PETTIGREW (seated so low in his chair that one mightn't see that it was occupied if they didn't look closely enough). We stop at the chair at the table's rear, in front of the fireplace at the back of the room, occupied by LORD VOLDEMORT himself. Two new arrivals, SEVERUS SNAPE and an unknown, then walk into the room and toward the conference table, making their obligatory glances upward as well.

VOLDEMORT
Yaxley, Snape, you are very nearly late. You have news?

SNAPE
My Lord, it seems the Order intends to move Potter from his current place of safety to the home of one of their own next Saturday, at nightfall.

VOLDEMORT
Good. Very good.

YAXLEY
My Lord, I have heard differently. It is the belief of the auror Dawlish that Potter is to be moved on the night of July 30th, just before his 17th birthday. He seemed quite certain.

SNAPE
He would seem certain if he had been bewitched to believe so to plant a false trail. The Order no longer trusts the Ministry, which means they would not allow classified information of this sort leaked within it; and they will not be using any means of transportation the Ministry can observe.

VOLDEMORT
He will need to move in the open then.

As he walks around the room, a snake the size of his thigh slithers by his side.

VOLDEMORT
That Harry Potter is alive today is more due to my failures than his triumphs. But I understand now what I did not before; I must be the one to kill Harry Potter, and I will be. I suspect the Order will ally with the Ministry to place any protection available to them over the boy's safehouse, and we will not be able to break those enchantments yet. We have begun our mission well, but Scrimgeour must be surrounded by our men before action can be taken. (turning to stare up at the suspended figure) The Ministry of Magic, once a noble magical institution, has allowed mudbloods, werewolves, and blood traitors to run free, but we shall cut away this..canker that infects us, until only the true blood remains. Lucius, I will require your wand. After all, I see no reason for you to have one any longer. (Lucius exchanges a small reluctant look with Narcissa. DRACO sits to Narcissa's left, failing to repress a look of simultaneous insatiable curiosity and genuine horror at the victim above.) Your wand, Lucius! (Lucius hands it over.) Ennervate!

The prisoner begins to return to consciousness.

VOLDEMORT
Yes, this will do fine. You recognize her, Draco? Of course, you will not have taken her classes. Severus, you will know her, no doubt.

As this woman struggles at her invisible bonds, Snape draws a maliciousl-but-slight grin.

SNAPE
Ah, yes.

WOMAN
Severus, please..help me...

VOLDEMORT
For those who do not know, we are joined tonight by Charity Burbage, who, until recently, taught Muggle Studies at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Yes, "Professor" Burbage taught the children of the wizarding world that wizards and muggles are not so very different after all; and she even wrote an impassioned defense of mudbloods in 'The Daily Prophet'. Miss Burbage writes that the dwindling of the purebloods is a most desirable occurrence, that we should welcome and embrace these thieves of our knowledge, our magic...She would have us all mate with muggles..

CHARITY pleads with Snape as he and Bellatrix look on in anticipation:

CHARITY
Severus...please...

VOLDEMORT
Avada Kedavra!

The room is momentarily lit by the green glow of the killing curse as Charity Burbage drops onto the table, causing a few Death Eaters to jump back in their seats slightly, and Draco to fall out of his. Voldemort simply walks back across the room, the giant snake slithering by his side.

VOLDEMORT
Dinner, Nagini.

FADE OUT

And I went back and made a lot of revisions to "Will and Won't" and "Horace Slughorn" and I think they're both much better scenes now.

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

IenjoyAcidPops, your script is nice but it has two very major flaws in it: the characters of Yaxley and Charity, both will never be seen again. I would recommend switching Yaxley with Bellatrix (who will have a great role later), and Charity with Ollivander (just cut the murder - have him tortured for information, instead).

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

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Originally Posted by Blast_ended (Post 4920592)

I get what you're saying: as Bellatrix and Ollivander both have sizable roles in the plot later where Yaxley and Charity don't, intro Bella and Ollivander sooner. But I'd really rather just leave it as is because 1) Yaxley is just a prop, just a spy to bring some false info Voldy's way in this one scene (I'm cutting the Ministry break-in), so it's not really giving Bella any more screentime of value if I put her in his place, 2) I want to convey the idea that Voldemort really has raised an army, not just a small clump of regulars (I'm slightly warming up to that old suggestion of putting Bellatrix in the DE attack on Hogwarts in HBP.) 3) We'll see Ollivander being tortured soon enough, and with the whole Muggle-Born Registration Commission issue and all, I think it makes more sense for it to be Charity Burbage, and a much more powerful end to the scene and kick-off to the film. In my opinion, of course.

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

And the Dursleys depart (this is, of course, just after the appearance of the title):

INT. #4 PRIVET DRIVE - THE DURSLEYS' HOUSE - SITTING ROOM

FADE IN

HARRY walks into the room as UNCLE VERNON paces, lost in thought. AUNT PETUNIA and DUDLEY sit on the couch waiting, surrounded by bags and suitcases; the sitting room is almost entirely empty.

HARRY
What is it this time?

VERNON
I've changed my mind.

HARRY
(sarcastic) There's a surprise.

PETUNIA
Do not take that tone -

VERNON
Now, now, Petunia. Well, boy, you claim this Lord..Voldything -

HARRY
Lord Voldemort, and we've been through this before; it's not a claim, it's a fact. He's been back for two years, and almost all The Order of the Phoenix are convinced that as the protection that keeps this place safe as long as I call it home runs out right when I turn 17, he'll be coming after you as soon as possible - whether it's to get information on me or because he thinks he can have at me by luring me here to save you.

Harry's and Vernon's eyes meet for a moment here, both clearly wondering the same thing.

HARRY
You need to go into hiding, and you're being offered the best protection there is. Hestia Jones and Dedalus Diggle are more than capable.

VERNON
Well, what am I to do about work - and Dudley's school?!

HARRY
None of that matters! Don't you understand, all this stuff that's been happening, the accidents, the disappearances, the deaths, it's all because of him. Even this mist - that's caused by the dementors; they're breeding. And if you don't remember what those are ask your son, he almost had his soul sucked out by one.

VERNON
Alright, alright, you've made your point!

HARRY
I hope so.

DUDLEY
Dementors...I didn't know there were more of them. (pause) Dad, I'm going with these Order people.

HARRY
Smartest thing you've ever said, Dudley.

And this seems to have made the decision for Vernon and Petunia as well, as the doorbell rings. Harry answers it to greet HESTIA JONES and DEDALUS DIGGLE of THE ORDER OF THE PHOENIX.

DEDALUS
Mr. Potter.

HESTIA
Hello, Harry.

HARRY
Hi guys, thanks for doing this.

DEDALUS
Oh, not at all, not at all. Well (stepping over the threshold followed by Hestia), good evening Harry Potter's relatives!

It appears the Dursleys do not enjoy being greeted thus.

DEDALUS
Harry's told you the plan, then? (The Dursleys nod - Vernon grunts slightly - in affirmation.) Excellent; well, then, shall we be off?

Although they stand at the ready, the Dursleys make no movement forward.

HESTIA
Oh, perhaps we should give them a moment alone.

DEDALUS
Oh yes, of course.

HARRY
No, really, there's no need.

HESTIA
Well, surely you'd want to see each other off; you are family, after all.

HARRY
Well, they don't think of me as family so much as a waste of space.

DUDLEY
I don't think you're a waste of space.

Somewhat shocked looks from Vernon, Petunia, and especially Harry follow this statement.

HARRY
Oh...well, thanks, Dudley.

Dudley seems to be looking for the right words to convey his feelings before he says:

DUDLEY
You saved my life.

Dudley walks forward a bit and reaches out his hand to shake Harry's.

HARRY
(shaking it in return) Blimey, Dudley, did the dementors blow a different personality into you?

DUDLEY
Dunno. Well, see you, Harry.

HARRY
...yeah, maybe.

Petunia takes this moment to walk over and hug/suffocate her son, sobbing "Dudders, that was so sweet".

VERNON
Well, are we going or not?

DEDALUS
Yes, we ought to be. We'll leave these things (pointing his wand to the luggage and sending it vanishing) waiting for us). And (shaking Harry's hand himself) good luck to you, Mr. Potter.

HESTIA
Our hopes lie with you.

HARRY
Er..right...

Dedalus and Hestia walk out followed by Vernon, who turns to give Harry a cursory "Goodbye, boy". Dudley escapes his mother's grip to follow after him, but Petunia remains hovering just outside the doorway, apparently wanting to say something herself.

PETUNIA
I-w-goodbye, then.

HARRY
Goodbye.

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

I'm so sorry I haven't been dedicated to this thread and I'm sory that I haven't been updating, but I'm afraid to say... I DO have a life!:lol:

Anyway...

I finally decided to write a bit more of PS (Maybe it was because the writer's strike was over:p). It's my lengthy first draft version, so PLEASE don't say "It's tooooooooooooooo long" cos I haven't got around to cutting things yet (That's stage 2)

So...

Here it is:

PS: The Journey from Platform 9 3/4, The Sorting HatEXT. LAKE - HOGWARTS - EVENING
(CONTINUOUS ACTION) (1/9/1991)

The first-years (Harry, Ron, Hermione, NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM, DEAN THOMAS, SEAMUS FINNIGAN, PARVATI PATIL, LAVENDER BROWN, Draco Malfoy, Crabbe, Goyle, PANSY PARKINSON, BLAISE ZABINI, THEODORE NOTT, MILLICENT BULSTRODE, DAPHNE GREENGRASS, TRACEY DAVIS, PADMA PATIL, MICHAEL CORNER, ANTHONY GOLDSTEIN, TERRY BOOT, MANDY BROCKLEHURST, MORAG MCDOUGAL, LISA TURPIN, SU LI, STEPHEN CORNFOOT, KEVIN ENTWHISTLE, ERNIE MACMILLIAN, HANNAH ABBOTT, SUSAN BONES, JUSTIN FINCH-FLECHTLEY, MEGAN JONES, WAYNE HOPKINS , SALLY-ANN PERKS, plus 4 OTHER BOYS and 5 OTHER GIRLS) all gaze across the lake at a magnificent sight.

(^I might be a slight bit pedantic:whistle:)

A castle with seven floors and seven towers stands upon the cliff face: Hogwarts.

INT. UNDERGROUND HARBOUR - HOGWARTS - EVENING
(1/9/1991)

The boats sail smoothly into the harbour and, once the boats moor, the first-years hop out.

RUBEUS HAGRID
Oy, you there! Is this your toad?

Neville Longbottom turns back to see Hagrid scooping a toad out of one of the boats.

NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM
Trevor!

Most of the other first-years laugh. Neville takes Trevor, rather embrassingly.

EXT. HOGWARTS GROUNDS - EVENING
(1/9/1991)

Hagrid and the first-years come out from a passageway and make their way towards a huge, oak door.

RUBEUS HAGRID
Everyone here?
(To Neville)
You there, still got yer toad?

Neville nods. Hagrid raises an enormous fist and knocks the door.
It swings opens at once to show a very stern woman waiting for them. It is Minerva McGonagall, 10 years older.

RUBEUS HAGRID (CONT’D)
The firs' years, Professor McGonagall.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Thank you, Hagrid. I will take them from here.

INT. ENTRANCE HALL - HOGWARTS - EVENING
(CONTINUOUS ACTION) (1/9/1991)

The first-years follow McGonagall inside. Hagrid slips through a large doorway to the right and Harry notices that the rest of the school is in there.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Welcome to Hogwarts. The start-of-term banquet will begin shortly, but before you take your seats in the Great Hall, you will be sorted into your houses. The Sorting is a very important ceremony because, while you are here, your house will be something like your family within Hogwarts. You will have classes with the rest of your house, sleep in your house dormitory, and spend free time in your house common room. The four houses are called Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw, and Slytherin. Each house has its own noble history and each has produced outstanding witches and wizards. While you are at Hogwarts, your triumphs will earn your house points, while any rulebreaking will lose house points. At the end of the year, the house with the most points is awarded the house cup, a great honor. I hope each of you will be a credit to whichever house becomes yours. The Sorting Ceremony will take place in a few minutes in front of the rest of the school. I suggest you all smarten yourselves up as much as you can while you are waiting. I shall return when we are ready for you. Please wait quietly.

(NB: I will defianatly cut some of that)

McGonagall also goes through the right hand doorway (to the Great Hall).

HARRY POTTER
How exactly do they sort us into houses?

RON WEASLEY
Some sort of test, I think. Fred said it hurts a lot, but I think he was joking.

Harry looks a bit scared at this prospect. Everyone is quiet, except...

HERMIONE GRANGER
I wonder which spell we’ll be tested on. Maybe we’ll need to -

But her eyes suddenly widen. Harry jumps and few people scream.

Twenty ghosts, transparent and pearly white in colour, glide thorough the wall the wall and through the marble staircase.

FAT FRIAR
Forgive and forget, I say, we ought to give him a second chance -

NEARLY-HEADLESS NICK
'My dear Friar, haven't we given Peeves all the chances he deserves? He gives us all a bad name and you know, he's not really even a ghost -
(Noticing the first-years)
I say, what are you all doing here?

No one answers.

FAT FRIAR
New students! About to be Sorted, I suppose?

A few fist-years nod or smile

FAT FRIAR (CONT’D)
Hope to see you in Hufflepuff! My old house, you know.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Move along now. The Sorting Ceremony's about to start.

McGonagall returns and the ghosts glide along the corridor opposote the Great Hall.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Now, follow me.

Harry and Ron get into line and walk through the right hand doors to...

INT. GREAT HALL - HOGWARTS - EVENING
(CONTINUOUS ACTION) (1/9/1991)

...the Great Hall. Thousands of candles float near the ceiling which looks like the sky outside.

HERMIONE GRANGER
(To the person next to her)
Its bewitched to look like the sky outside. I read about it in Hogwarts, A History.

On either side of the first-years are two long tables of students and right up the front, a table of staff.

Near the staff table is a patched and frayed pointed hat, sitting atop a three legged stool. Everyone in the hall stares at it.

Suddenly, miraculously, a rip appeared and the hat begins to sing.

SORTING HAT
Oh, you may not think I'm pretty, But don't judge on what you see, I'll eat myself if you can find A smarter hat than me. You can keep your bowlers black, Your top hats sleek and tall, For I'm the Hogwarts Sorting Hat And I can cap them all. There's nothing hidden in your head The Sorting Hat can't see, So try me on and I will tell you Where you ought to be. You might belong in Gryffindor, Where dwell the brave at heart, Their daring, nerve, and chivalry Set Gryffindors apart; You might belong in Hufflepuff, Where they are just and loyal, Those patient Hufflepuffis are true And unafraid of toil; Or yet in wise old Ravenclaw, if you've a ready mind, Where those of wit and learning, Will always find their kind; Or perhaps in Slytherin You'll make your real friends, Those cunning folk use any means To achieve their ends. So put me on! Don't be afraid! And don't get in a flap! You're in safe hands, though I have none For I'm a Thinking Cap!

The whole hall applauds.

RON WEASLEY
So we've just got to try on the hat! I'll kill Fred, he was going on about wrestling a troll.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Hannah Abbot.

(I don't have a clue how to format this scene to my liking but this is my best go at it)

LATER

Hannah sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT
Hufflepuff!

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Susan Bones.

LATER

Susan now sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT
Hufflepuff!

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Terry Boot.

SORTING HAT (V.O.)
Ravenclaw!

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Mandy Brocklehurst.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Millicent Bulstrode

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Michael Corner

LATER

Michael sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT
Ravenclaw!

LATER

Vincent Crabbe sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT (CONT’D)
Slytherin!

LATER

Tracey Davis sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT (CONT’D)
Slytherin!

LATER

Justin Finch-Fletchly sits apon the stool with the sorting hat on.

SORTING HAT (CONT’D)
Hufflepuff

LATER

The amount of first-years have thinned.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Hermione Granger.

Hermione almost runs to the stool and jams the hat on her head.

A moment’s pause. Then...

SORTING HAT
Gryffindor!

Ron groans.

LATER

Neville sits anxiously on the stool with the sorting hat on. It opens it’s rip... but closes it. Again this happens. The hat looks down at Neville and Neville looks even more anxious then finally...

SORTING HAT (CONT’D)
Gryffindor!

Neville runs off towards the Gryffindor table, amongst laughter still wearing the hat.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Draco Malfoy.

Draco comes forward. He is not even sitting down and the hat is barely touching his head, when...

SORTING HAT
Slytherin!

Draco goes toward the Slytherin table, very pleased with himself.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Pansy Parkinson.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Padma Patil.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Parvati Patil.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Sally-Anne Perks.

LATER

MINERVA MCGONAGALL (CONT’D)
Harry Potter.

The hall suddenly goes quiet, then erupts with conversations.
Harry sits down on the stool and the hat is placed on his head. A small voice can be heard.

SORTING HAT (O.S.)
Hmm... Difficult. Very difficult. Plenty of courage, I see. Not a bad mind either. There's talent, A my goodness, yes - and a nice thirst to prove yourself, now that's interesting... So where shall I put you?

With all his might, Harry thinks:

HARRY POTTER (V.O.)
Not Slytherin... Not Slytherin...

SORTING HAT (O.S.)
Not Slytherin, eh? Are you sure? You could be great, you know, it's all here in your head, and Slytherin will help you on the way to greatness, no doubt about that - no? Well, if you're sure - better be...

SORTING HAT (CONT’D)
(To everyone in the hall)
Gryffindor!

Everyone cheers. Harry looks to Ron as he passes the line of first-years still to be sorted and sees him clapping, but looking nervous. At the Gryffindor table, Ron’s brothers chant.

GEORGE WEASLEY
We’ve got Potter!

FRED WEASLEY
We’ve got Potter!

Harry sits near to the ghost he saw earlier (Nearly-Headless Nick) who pats him on the shoulder. Harry shivers as he does so.

SORTING HAT
Ravenclaw!

Lisa Turpin goes towards the Ravenclaw table.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
Ron Weasley.

Ron, pale sits on the stool. Harry crosses his fingers.

SORTING HAT
Gryffindor!

Harry claps loudy. Ron makes his way towards the Gryfindor table and sits next to Harry.

MINERVA MCGONAGALL
(In the background)
Blaise Zabini

One of Ron’s brother’s leans across Harry.

PERCY WEASLEY
(Pompously)
Well done, Ron, excellent.

SORTING HAT
Slytherin!

McGonagall rolls up her scroll of parchment and takes away the stool. Harry stares hungrily at his empty plate.
At the staff table, Albus Dumbledore (10 years older) gets to his feet.

ALBUS DUMBLEDORE
Welcome to a new year at Hogwarts! Before we begin our banquet, I would like to say a few words. And here they are: Nitwit! Blubber! Oddment! Tweak! Thank you.

Harry stares blankly at Dunbledore.

HARRY POTTER
Is he - a bit mad?

PERCY WEASLEY
Mad? He's a genius! Best wizard in the world! But he is a bit mad, yes. Potatoes, Harry?

Harry looks shocked and surprised. Almost anything possibly edible is now lying on the once empty table. Harry piles up his plate.

Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

While posting in the HBP Thread I realize I for some reason stop posting here :lol:

Ok a fair warning before you read this....yes I cut out Harry going to the RoR...why...because at the time I had no idea it would turn out to be important...guess I suck at clues and suck lol

Of course if I have the chance to do a rewrite I will of course add the scene back in...but it's still cool to see where my mind was on cuts pre-DH and how many things I will now change...tell me what you guys think.

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INT. THE GREAT HALL-EVENING

All the houses are in the Great Hall having dinner. Lavender is sitting down the table glaring at Hermione. Hermione clears her throat and proceeds to eat her dinner and Ron turns to Harry.

RON
We split up Harry, when she saw me coming out of the dormitory with Hermione. She couldn’t see you because of the cloak, been giving me the evil eye all morning..

HARRY
Well you don’t mind it’s over, do you?

RON
No, it was pretty bad while she was yelling, but atleast I didn’t have to finish it

HERMIONE
Coward! Well, it was a bad night for romance all around. Ginny and Dean broke up as well.

(She gives Harry a slight smile)

HARRY
Really? Why?

HERMIONE
Something silly about him always trying to help her through the portrait hole.

Harry looks over at Dean who is picking angrily at his food and then see’s a group of people around Katie Bell who finally just returned from the hospital.

HERMIONE
Glad to see Katie’s doing better. Did you talk to her?

HARRY
Yeah, she doesn’t remember anything. Just great. Still have no idea what Malfoy is up too…maybe I could take another sip of Felix…

HERMIONE
Harry that’ll be a waste of potion. You’ll need all the luck you can get if Dumbledore takes you along with him…

Ginny walks into the Great Hall in a hurry and stops to talk to them

GINNY
Hey guys.

RON
Well where have you been?

GINNY
Have you not figured it out yet Ron that I don’t have to tell you anything.

RON
You need to watch your mouth!

HARRY
Ron lay off. Ginny, are you…ok?

GINNY
Yeah I’m fine,. Can’t stay
(She grabs a piece of food.)
Have class, later.

She starts to walk off and once again we see Harry with a struggling look on his face. His friendship or his heart, which would he choose? Should he ask her, is now the right time?

HARRY
(He jumps up)
GINNY!

GINNY
Yes Harry?

HARRY
I…um…I…nevermind.

GINNY
(She smiles)
Whenever you’re ready Harry.

INT. DARK CORRIDOR/BOYS BATHROOM-NIGHT

Harry is walking down a dark corridor alone. He hears crying off in the distance and goes to see whats wrong. The sound is coming from the Boys Bathroom. Harry walk towards the boys bathroom and peaks his head in the door and we sees Draco on the floor crying and Moaning Mrytle beside him.

MOANING MYRTLE
Don’t…please…tell me what’s wrong…I can help you.

DRACO
No one can help me now, I can’t do it. It won’t work…and unless I do it soon…he says he’ll kill me.

Harry moves his foot and there’s a creak. Malfoy looks up in the mirror and see’s Harry standing there. He quickly pulls out his wand and a spell flies off his wand hitting the wall beside Harry. Harry pulls out his wand and throws out a spell and Malfoy blocks it.

MOANING MYRTLE
STOP! STOP IT BOTH OF YOU!

Malfoy throws another non verbal spell that Harry ducks and it explodes the toilet behind him. Harry throws a spell that Malfoy jumps out of the way and it goes through Mytle who screams.

DRACO
I’ve had enough of your meddling Potter!

HARRY
So finish it then!

MALFOY
Crucio!

Harry ducks behind into a stall and narrowly avoids the curse.

HARRY
(He takes a deep breath and quickly points his wand at Malfoy)
EXPELLIARMUS!

DRACO
PROTEGO!

The spell deflects back onto Harry knocking him off of his feet. Harry immeditley jumps to his feet as Draco points his wand at him.

DRACO
Cruci…

HARRY
SECTUMSEMPRA!

Blood shots from Malfoys chest and some splatters on his face and on the mirror right behind him. He staggers back and collapses on the floor shaking as he bleeds heavily.

HARRY
No…I didn’t…

MOANING MYRTLE
MURDER! MURDER IN THE BATHROOM! MURDER!!!

The door flies open and Snape runs in. He looks at Harry and then quickly at Draco’s bloody body on the floor. He runs and kneels down to Malfoy. He pulls out his wand and starts to mutter an incantation under his breathe. The blood flow starts to stop and we see the wounds knitting themselves. He helps Malfoy up, who is slouching in pain still.

SNAPE
You need the hospital wing.
(Malfoy puts his arm around Snapes neck and they begin to walk out of the bathroom.)
And you Potter…you wait here for me.

They walk out of the door and the scene cuts to Harry staring at the mirror in the bathroom with a look of shock still in his eyes. He can’t believe he almost killed Malfoy. Snape walks into the bathroom and closes the door behind him.

HARRY
I didn’t mean it to happen, I didn’t know what that spell did.

SNAPE
Apparently I underestimated you, Potter. Who would have thought you knew such Dark Magic? Who taught you that spell?

HARRY
I…read it somewhere.

SNAPE
Where?

HARRY
It was a library book, I can’t remember what it was called.

SNAPE
(Snape stares at him for a second, Harry realizing he’s looking into his mind looks away suddenly.)
You know what I think, Potter? I think you are a liar and a cheat and that you will pay for what you’ve done.

They stare at each other for a second and the scene cuts to Harry, Ron, and Hermione sitting outside of Hogwarts.

EXT. COURTYARD-AFTERNOON

HARRY
I got detention every Saturday until the end of term, I’m going to miss the last match of the year.

HERMIONE
You’re lucky that’s all you got. I won’t say I told you so…

RON
Leave it, Hermione.

HERMIONE
I told you there was something wrong with that Prince person Harry and I was right wasn’t I?

HARRY
No, I don’t think you were.

HERMIONE
How can you still stick up for that book when that spell…

HARRY
The Prince only copied it out Hermione! It’s not like he was advising anyone to use it!

Ginny walks up towards them.

GINNY
What’s going on?

HERMIONE
He’s defending that Prince person when I’ve told him since day one it was bad news!

HARRY
Without the Prince I’d never have won the Felix Felicis. I’d never have known how to save Ron from poisoning, I’d never have…

HERMIONE
Got a reputation for Potions brilliance you don’t deserve!

GINNY
Give it a rest Hermione! By the sound of it, Malfoy was trying to use an Unforgivable Curse, you should be glad Harry had something good up his sleeve!

HERMIONE
Of course I’m glad he wasn’t cursed, but you can’t call that Sectumsempra spell good, look where it’s landed him Ginny! And I’d have thought, seeing what this has done to your chances in the match…

GINNY
Oh don’t start acting like you understand Quidditch you’ll only embarrass yourself.

Hermione and Ginny stare at each other angrily and Hermione grabs her books and storms off. Harry looks worried because this is the first time Hermione and Ginny ever disagreed.

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