
October 3rd, 2007, 10:28 pm
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Too... Much... Fangirling...
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Join Date: 17th October 2005
Location: Auckland, NZ
Age: 28
Posts: 3,281
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Re: Fan Scripts: Harry Potter Remakes
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Originally Posted by Phrozenone
I have a script that I've done for HBP
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It's REALLY great to see someone else's script. Are you ready for some constructive criticism?
I think that your scenes are too cutty. Meaning that they suddenly end, and then they suddenly start somewhere else, and only if you read the book would you know how they got there. That's all for now.
You can give me criticism too.
Here's the next part of the 'Boy Who Lived' scene. Together, it's still lengthy.
The second half of the arrival scene I am cutting: 
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Last edited by ArryGrotter; October 4th, 2007 at 11:22 pm.
Reason: Expand, fieldset
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