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Originally Posted by Dementor13
HARRY: He never got murdered. He made a fatal mistake and arranged the whole thing with your faithful servant... Severus Snape. He stopped working for you once you killed my mother... the only woman he've ever loved.
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"The man you THOUGHT was your faithful servant." And Severus stopped working for Voldie
before Lily's death, not after (I think Harry's exact words were "from the moment you started hunting my mother.") Also, it isn't clear from the above that it wasn't DD who was in love with Lily, but Severus.
Otherwise, though, it's not bad at all.
