Harry Says a Few Words

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Discussion for Harry Says a Few Words by Mudblood428.

[SnuffleShanks]

I thought that it was a very touching sentiment and written very well in context, like JKR's style. However, at one point you have Harry saying to the crowd, "You're his equals, his colleagues, his superiors, even." I don't think that Harry believes that anyone is even Dumbledore's equal, let alone superior. That is my only real complaint; I enjoyed reading it.

[Mudblood428]

Thank you . It's funny, because I considered taking that part out, but I think the main reason why I left that bit in was because Harry is addressing, not only his classmates, but also bureaucratic body of wizards and I wondered if he shouldn't be just a little diplomatic in front of people like Scrimgeour and whatnot rather than stirring controversy at an already tense event. In the end, I figured people could read it as an ironic statement - "politics and hierarchy makes you higher-ranked... but that's about all. I was just his student. But I still knew him best." Or something to that effect. Good lordy, I overthink these things...

[Lairy_Fights]

Harry has never been one to promote himself and only raises his voice to those beyond his closest friends when he must. Although it's hard for me to imagine Harry *wanting* to stand up and become the center of attention, especially when there could be enemies present, I could better see McGonagall, hearing the tufty-haired man speak for so long, focusing her shrewd eye on Harry and thinking to herself, "There's so much more to Dumbledore than that, and who better to hear it from than Harry, if he'll not object to being put on the spot." Harry's whole speech comes off as unplanned and unscripted, which is what makes it so beautiful and sincere. Good job!

By the way, can I leave instructions in my will for someone to contact you to write a seeming unplanned and unscripted eulogy for me, too?

[Mudblood428]

Originally Posted by Lairy_Fights

Harry has never been one to promote himself and only raises his voice to those beyond his closest friends when he must. Although it's hard for me to imagine Harry *wanting* to stand up and become the center of attention, especially when there could be enemies present, I could better see McGonagall, hearing the tufty-haired man speak for so long, focusing her shrewd eye on Harry and thinking to herself, "There's so much more to Dumbledore than that, and who better to hear it from than Harry, if he'll not object to being put on the spot."

That's fantastic, I hadn't even thought of that!

By the way, can I leave instructions in my will for someone to contact you to write a seeming unplanned and unscripted eulogy for me, too?

LOL! *blushes* I'm flattered! Are you expecting any Dark Wizards to do you in these days?

[Mollywobble92]

That was a very moving editorial! Thank you for expressing yourself so well!

[all4music]

*reaches for tissue box* lovely sentiments, thank you for sharing that with us

[kaydle50]

That was beautiful. And I must confess, that I too cried during and after the reading. How like Dumbledore, even with an eulogy, to encourage others. That was a lovely expression for Harry. Thanks

[Miranda1989]

Wow, that took me right back to when I first read the funeral scene, very emotive and well written. Well done!
Dumbledore lives on! (not literally but you know...)

[Mudblood428]

Big thank-yous to everyone who enjoyed the editorial. I confess... I cried quite a bit as I was writing it.

[Phoenix_Song778]

Wow! That was really beautiful! A great idea to write it from Harry's point of view. I think you captured what he would have said perfectly. Wonderful job!

[lunatonks]

omigod this was wonderful! totally depicted what Harry would say, are you on MNFF? i would love to read fanfiction written by you! you have a gift with words!

[Mudblood428]

Originally Posted by lunatonks

omigod this was wonderful! totally depicted what Harry would say, are you on MNFF? i would love to read fanfiction written by you! you have a gift with words!

Wow, thank you so much! You can find me on MNFF by clicking here. I hope you enjoy my other stuff!

[GasolineRainbow]

-sniff-
I cried.
That's all I have to say.
-.-;

[HPdork]

I really loved this--I thought it was very well written and sounded like something Harry would say. The only complaint I have is the use of the word "sullen" to describe McGonagall's voice before Harry begins to speak. No offense, but I think you've got the wrong definition. www.m-w.com defines sullen as "gloomily or resentfully silent or repressed." and also says "SULLEN implies a silent ill humor and a refusal to be sociable." In my opinion, McGonagall wouldn't sound sullen--she's not silent or refusing to be sociable, just depressed over Dumbledore's death. I think "somber" would work better in context. But other than that, it was absolutely awesome. Good job!

[Mudblood428]

Originally Posted by HPdork

The only complaint I have is the use of the word "sullen" to describe McGonagall's voice before Harry begins to speak. No offense, but I think you've got the wrong definition. www.m-w.com defines sullen as "gloomily or resentfully silent or repressed." and also says "SULLEN implies a silent ill humor and a refusal to be sociable." In my opinion, McGonagall wouldn't sound sullen--she's not silent or refusing to be sociable, just depressed over Dumbledore's death. I think "somber" would work better in context.

Pardon my french, but holy (insert word that rhymes 'snap')! You're absolutely right! I guess that's what I get for writing HP stuff during my lunch break, eh? Thanks for the heads up (now if only I could get in there and edit...)

[EmeraldCity]

do you write fanfiction?

[Mudblood428]

Originally Posted by EmeraldCity

do you write fanfiction?

Sure do. Check it out on MNFF here or on my website: Potter on Paper. Cheers!

[HPdork]

Originally Posted by Mudblood428

Thanks for the heads up

No problem, happy to help.

[Sunstar]

That was beautiful. I got chills from reading it, not to mention I teared up a little too.