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Old March 7th, 2008, 11:36 am
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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

I'm just all for the pan up

ALTHOUGH (I seem to be saying this alot tonight) Reading what you said just gave me a thought that sent shivers up my spine.

How about the entire time that they dialogue between Harry and Dumbledore is happening their backs are turned to the castle. So while all the 'I need Severus" and stuff is happening the audience see's the Dark Mark floating over the school in the distance. That would be CRAZY! Then Harry looks back and alerts Dumbledore..yadda yadda

To give you a visual reference...kinda like when Cedric and Harry were pulled to the graveyard. Just imagine that building in the background of that scene is Hogwarts with the Dark Mark and Cedric is Dumbledore....wow

Although I still want my pan though THAT could possibly make me change my mind because I can see the audience reaction while Harry and Dumbledore are clueless.

Good idea MoD!!

*Starts pondering next HBP script rewrite*


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Old March 7th, 2008, 11:48 am
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No problem my friend.

Hey, It's me

That's actually exactly what I had in mind. That the audience would see the mark and the suspense would be that the characters don't know. It's like one of those classic: "BEHIND YOU!!!" moments in the old horror films.

I can't wait for the rewrite! Don't forgot to include my own lines in the begining when Harry and Dumbledore are walking to Slughorn's house:

DUMBLEDORE
Stay vigilant, Harry. I give you every right to use any jinx, hex or spell that comes to mind if you need to defend yourself. These are dangerous times.

HARRY
Alright, but I can't say I'm too worried, sir.

DUMBLEDORE
Oh? And why not?

Harry is now very arkward and shy.

HARRY
Er...well....I am with you.

Dumbledore laughs.

DUMBLEDORE
Ah, Harry you make it so hard to be modest....

Harry smiles

DUMBLEDORE
Even so..it won't hurt to keep an eye out, hmm? *serious and grave now* Some evil in this world is beyond even me, Harry.


That's what your revised scirpt needs. More ADAPTATION. Alot of your lines are only taken from the book. Be creative. Add some new life to the scirpt. Make up your own lines keeping to the canon and nature of the character of course but don't be afraid to be creative.

Keep up the good work!


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Thanks and I'll surely add those lines (To your credit of course) and you're right.

I really didn't want to go into hardcore adaptation mode until I saw OOTP though you know? Now that I have in my mind what I want to do (And I know the ending of the series YAY) I'll be able to really get in and try to make it my own (But keeping the feeling right)

You've inspired me to start rewriting HBP (I'll finish DH soon enough..there's SO much I need to change in HBP first) So when I wake up the rewriting will begin.

Also since I'm tired and there have been a number of posts since earlier I'll just go ahead and post the ending of my HBP script. It's been a long journey but it only took 8 pages for me to make it here. Thanks to everyone in this thread who has given me opinions and I'll be using them next time.

Where's ArryGrotter? You should get back in here and stop having a 'real' life Anyways here's the ending to the third version of my HBP script....4th version starts tomorrow and hopefully there will be interest to read it when I'm done.

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EXT. FOOT OF TOWER/HOGWARTS GROUNDS/HAGRIDS CABIN-SAME NIGHT

The death eater body becomes rigid and falls as Harry runs and jumps over it down the stairs after Snape and Draco. We see him run out of the tower into the ongoing battle that’s below. We see McGonagall, Neville, Ginny, Tonks, Lupin, Ron, fighting against a group of Death Eaters. Amycus is throwing spells at Ginny but they seem to just bounce off of her.

AMYCUS
You can’t dance forever pretty..Crucio..Cruico!!!!

HARRY
Impedimenta!

The spell hits Amycus in the chest and he is lifted off the ground and slammed into a wall.

GINNY
HARRY LOOK OUT!!

Harry turns around and Greyback lounges towards him. Harry steps back but trips over a body. He looks and see’s Bill bloody face staring blankly to the sky.

HARRY
No…

GREYBACK
I’ve always wanted to take a bite of the famous...Harry...Potter…

He jumps on Harry with his teeth glaring. He opens his mouth to take a bite.

HARRY
Petrificus Totalus!
(We see Greybacks eyes widen as he collaspes against Harry. Harry pushes him off.)
Ginny, did you see Snape and Malfoy?

GINNY
Yeah they went that way but Harry….

He gets up and starts to run towards the castle. He starts to run full speed dodging spells as they fly all around him and trips over a body. He sits up and see’s it is Neville.s

HARRY
Neville are you…

NEVILLE
M’all right Harry. Snape n’ Malfoy…

HARRY
I’m on it.

He jumps up and once again runs towards the castle. The scene cuts to him running out of the front doors of Hogwarts and we see an outline of three people running across the yard. There is an explosing in the distance and we see that Hagrids hut is on fire.

HARRY
HAGRID!!!

Harry starts to run towards the cabin when a spell hits him in his back knocking him over. We see him grab his wand and just as he spins around yells

HARRY
Impedimenta!

The spell hits one of the two death eaters that are behind him and Harry gets up and begins to run towards Hagrids cabin. He see’s Hagrid facing off against a Death Eater and we now see Snape and Draco still running.

HARRY
Stupefy!

The spell misses Snape and he stops.

SNAPE
Run Draco.

Draco runs off as Snape turns around to face Harry. They’re about twenty yards apart from each other.

HARRY
Cruc…

Snape waves his hand and Harry is thrown backwards off his feet. Harry gets up again and points his wand at Snape.

HARRY
Cruci….

He is knocked off of his feet again.

SNAPE
No Unforgivable Curses from you Potter! You haven’t got the nerve or the ability…

HARRY
Incarc…
(Snape flicks his arm and the spell is canceled.)
FIGHT BACK!!! FIGHT BACK YOU COWARDLY…

SNAPE
Coward, did you call me, Potter? Your father would never attack me unless it was four on one, what would you call him, I wonder?

HARRY
STUPE…

SNAPE
Blocked again and again and again until you learn to keep your mouth shut and your mind closed, Potter!
(He looks at the Death Eater running up behind Harry.)
Now come! It is time to be gone, before the Ministry turns up…

HARRY
Impedi…

DEATH EATER
Crucio!

Harry falls on the ground shaking in pain.

SNAPE
No!
(The Death Eater cancels the curse.)
Have you forgotten our orders? Potter belongs to the Dark Lord…. we are to leave him. Go! Go!

The Death Eater runs off as Harry lets out a scream of rage. He pushes himself up and points his wand at Snape.

HARRY
Sectum…!

Snape flicks his wand and the spell is repelled knocking the wand from Harry hand.

SNAPE

No, Potter! You dare use my own spells against me? It was I who invented them.

HARRY
You!?!

SNAPE
Yes Harry, I am the Half Blood Prince. And you’d turn my inventions on me would you? I don’t think so.

Harry runs for his wand and Snape shoots a spell at it knocking it furthur away.

HARRY
Kill me then, kill me like you killed him, you coward…

SNAPE
DON’T…CALL ME A COWARD

He points his wand at Harry and a Death Eater runs from behind the flames.

DEATH EATER
The Ministry is closing in lets go Snape…LET’S GO!

SNAPE
Until next time Potter…

Snape points his wand at Harry and we see a flash of light as a cut swipes across Harry’s face knocking him backwards and onto the ground. The scene fades to black…

EXT. HAGRIDS HUT- NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

HAGRID
(In the darkness.)
Harry…Harry…
(As Harry opens his eyes we see Hagrid pop into view.) Yeh all righ’? Speak ter me, Harry…

HARRY
I’m all right…are you?

HAGRID
Course I am…take more’n that ter finish me.
(He helps Harry up and Harry looks to see Hagrids house burnt down with still a few fires burning.)
S’not too bad, Nothin Dumbledore won’ be able to put righ…

HARRY
(With a look of realization and hurt on his face.)
Hagrid…

HAGRID
What happened up thur Harry? I jus’ saw them Death Eaters runnin’ down from the castle, but what the ruddy hell was Snape doin with ‘em? Where’s he gone…was he chasin’ them?

HARRY
He…he killed…

HAGRID
Killed? Snape kiled? What’re yeh on abou’ Harry?

HARRY
Dumbledore.

HAGRID
Wha?

HARRY
Snape killed…Dumbledore

Harry looks up and we see a shot of the Dark Mark over the tower.

EXT. FOOT OF ASTRONOMY TOWER-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

The scene cuts to Harry walking towards a crowd of students and teachers standing on the foot of the tower. He and Hagrid move slowly through the crowd of people. When they make it to the front the camera pans to a shot of Dumbledore lying on the ground with his arms and legs stretched out. Harry falls to his knees and begins to cry. We see a shot of Hagrid falling to his knees and crying helplessly. Harry looks up and next to his body is the object that Dumbledore got out of the cave. Harry grabs it and opens it revealing a sheet of parchment. Harry takes it out and opens it and the camera pans over his shoulder so the audience can read what it says.

{To the Dark Lord. I know I will be dead long before you read this but I want you to know that it was I who discovered your secret. I have stolen the real Horcrux and intend to destory it as soon as I can. I face death in the hope that when you meet your match, you will be mortal once more. R.A.B.}

Harry crumbles the paper in his hands and closes his eyes as the camera pans back and fades once again to black.

INT. HOSPITAL WARD-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

The scene fades back in with a torn Harry walking into the hospital ward. We see Neville asleep on the bed and Hermion, Luna, Tonks, and Lupin are around a bed at the end of the ward. Harry walks ups to Neville’s bed and Ginny walks up to him as he looks at him.

GINNY
He’s gonna be alright.

HARRY
Is anyone else…dead?

GINNY
No, but Bill was…
(she drops her head as tears begin to fall)
He was attacked by Greyback. We don’t know what the aftereffects will be
(He grabs her and hugs her.)
Mum, Dad, and Fluer are on their way.

HARRY
Fluer?

GINNY
Apparently the cow really does love him.
(She starts to cry)
Oh Harry, if we hadn’t had your Felix potion, I think we’d all be dead.

INT. SAME ROOM-MINUETES LATER

The scene cuts to the all sitting around Bills bed, Ron is also there with them. Bill is severly torn but bandaged. Professor McGonnagell is talking to Madam Pomfrey in the distance

LUPIN
I don’t think that Bill we be a true werewolf, seeing as Greyback wasn’t transformed at the time.

RON
Dumbledore might know something that’d work, though. Where is he? Bill fought those maniacs on Dumbledore’s orders, he can’t leave him in this state…

GINNY
Ron…Dumbledore….

LUPIN
What is it Ginny?

TONKS
(She looks Ginny in her eyes.)
No…it can’t be?

RON
What is it?

HARRY
He’s dead Ron.

LUPIN
No!
(He jumps up in a state of shock)
It…no..I won’t…

He puts his hand up to his mouth and turns around. Tonks jumps up and comforts him.

RON
How did it happen?

HARRY
Snape killed him. I was under the Invisibility Cloak, he immobilized me. Malfoy came through the door and disarmed him
(We see a shot of Hermione putting her hand over her mouth at the realization that Harry has been right about Malfoy all along.),
More death eaters arrived, and then Snape. Snape did the Avada Kadavra.

We hear Madam Pomfrey burst into tears and McGonnagell rushes up to the bed.

McGONNAGELL
Snape? I…can’t believe it…but he trusted…

TONKS
Dumbledore swore he was on our side…

LUPIN
He was a highly accomplished Occlumens, Snape….

McGONNAGALL
I…I don’t understand…

HARRY
What’s not to understand? Snape passed Voldemot the information that made him hunt down my mum and dad.

LUPIN
What do you…?

HARRY
Snape then told Dumbledore he hadn’t realized what he was doing and that he was sorry they were dead.

LUPIN
Snape hated James, how could Dumbledore believe that!

The room goes silent for a moment as everyone looks like they’re going through an inner emotional conflict.

RON
I messed up, Harry....

INT. OUTSIDE OF ROOM OF REQUIREMENTS/CORRIDOR- (FLASHBACK)

The scene fades to a flashback of Ron, Neville, and Ginny standing outside of the Room of Requiremnt.

RON (V.O.)
We were standing there waiting when he came out of the Room clutching his Hand of Glory, it only gives light to the holder. When he saw us it went instantly dark and we couldn’t see anything.

LUPIN (V.O.)
Luckily they ran into us immediately and told u what had happened. We found the Death Eaters minute’s later heading towards the Astronomy Tower. A fight broke out, one got away, probably to set off the Dark Mark.

INT. OUTSIDE SNAPES OFFICE- (FLASHBACK)

HERMIONE (V.O.)
Luna and I were outside of Snapes office. We didn’t know what was going on and it was nearly midnight when Professor Flitwick came sprinting down into the dungeons. He didn’t see us, but he ran in and we heard him telling Snape he had to go back with him. We heard a thump and Snape came running out…we thought Flitwick just fainted and we went to take care of him, relieved that Snape was going to help with the fight.

EXT. OUTSIDE THE ASTRONOMY TOWER-(FLASHBACK)

TONKS (V.O.)
We were losing the fight. Neville had been hurt and it was dark. Curses flying everywhere, the Malfoy boy had disappeared and then we see a group of Death Eaters running up the tower. We tried to get in but there was some kind of block. Snape ran through it without a problem however.

HARRY (V.O.)
You probably needed a Dark Mark tattoo to get through.

LUPIN (V.O.)
One of the Death Eaters fired off a hex that caused half the ceiling to fall and also broke the barrier. We all ran forward then Snape and the boy came down, of course we didn’t attack them. We let them past, we thought they were on our side…

INT. HOSPITAL WING-NIGHT

The scene now shifts back to present day.

RON
I can’t believe this…Dumbleodore…

Everyone looks at each other in silence. Tonks and Lupin embrace each other closely and Harry turns away and looks out of the window and see’s Fawkes sitting there on the ledge. A tear falls from Fawkes eye and he flies off. There is a wide shot of the school as Fawkes circles it paying his homage to Dumbledore.

INT. DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-NIGHT

The scene then shows a shot of Dumbledore’s office. Everything is as he left it, well except for one thing. The camera pans up and we see a painting of Dumbledore on the wall, asleep along with the other Headmasters and Headmistresses of the school.

The scene fades to black.

INT. GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-NIGHT (A COUPLE OF DAYS LATER)

The camera fades back in on Harry and Ron are sitting at the fire and Hermione walks in with a book.

HERMIONE
Harry, I found something out this morning, in the library.

HARRY
R.A.B?

HERMIONE
No, actually it’s about Snape.

HARRY
What about him?

HERMIONE
Well, it’s just that I was sort of right about the Half-Blood Prince business.

HARRY
Do you have to rub it in, Hermione? How d’you think I feel about that now?

HERMIONE
No, I didn’t mean that! Its just that I was right about Eileen Prince once owning the book. You see, she was Snape’s mother.
(She sits down beside him and pulls out an old Daily Prophet.)
It is an announcement about Eileen Prince marrying a man called Tobias Snape, and then later an announcement saying that she’d given birth to a…

HARRY
Murderer.

HERMIONE
Well…yes. Snape must have been proud of being ‘half a Prince’ you see? Tobias Snape was a muggle from what it said in here.

HARRY
It fits you think? He’s just like Voldemort, Pure-blood mother, muggle father. I should’ve shown the book to Dumbledore. All that time he was showing me how Voldemort was evil even when he was at school, and I had proof Snape was too.

The all fall silent and the scene fades to…

EXT. THE BLACK LAKE-EVENING

…A shot of the lake. Many witches and wizards are sitting in chairs in front of it. In the front of it was a table where a body covered in purple scarlet. There is a shot of Harry, Ginny, Ron, and Hermione sitting in their row, tears falling down Hermione eyes. The camera pans to show Hagrid sitting beside Grawp.

There is a big explosion as bright, white flames erupted around Dumbledore’s body. They rose and were transformed into a white marble tomb. We see arrows fly through the sky and we see a shot of the centaurs giving their tribute. Harry’s eyes fill with tears as he puts his hand over the locket that’s around his neck. We see shots of different witches and wizards before the scene cuts to Harry and Ginny are walking together in the midst of everyone else leaving from the funeral. He grabs her arm and stops walking. She turns and looks at him.

HARRY
Ginny…I….we…I can’t be involved with you anymore.

GINNY
(She smiles)
It’s for some stupid, nobil reason, isn’t it?

HARRY
It’s been like…like something out of someone else’s life, these last few weeks with you. But…I’ve got things to do alone now.
(She simply stares at him.)
Voldemort used people his enemies are close to. Think how much danger you’ll be in if we keep this up, he’ll try to get to me through you.


GINNY
What if I don’t care?

HARRY
But I do, about you. How do you think I’d feel if this…. if this was your funeral…

GINNY
(There is a moment of silence)
I never really gave up on you. Hermione told me if I go with some other people, maybe you would notice me a bit more…

HARRY
Smart girl that Hermione. (FYE: My little Kloves moment :lol)I just wish I’d asked you sooner. We could’ve had age’s…months…

GINNY
But you’ve been to busy saving the Wizarding world. I knew this would happen in the end. I knew that you wouldn’t be happy unless you were hunting Voldemort. Maybe that’s why I like you so much.

Harry looks away and see’s Ron holding Hermione as she cries in his shoulder. Lupin and Tonks are also holding hands and he looks down at her and wipes her hair from her face. Harry turns around and walks away from Ginny towards Dumbledore’s tomb.

SCRIMGEOUR
Harry! I’ve been hoping to have a word….

HARRY
No....

SCRIMGEOUR
This was a dreadful tragedy, Dumbledore and I had our disagreements, but he was a very great wizard. I know that you were very close to him…the bond between you two…

HARRY
What do you want?

SCRIMGEOUR
(He stares at Harry.)
The word is that you were with him when he left the school the night he died.

HARRY
Whose words?

SCRIMGEOUR
There were two broomsticks on top of the tower Harry, the ministry can add two and two.

HARRY
Glad to hear it. Where I went with Dumbledore and what we did is my business. He didn’t want people to know.

SCRIMGEOUR
Dumbledore is gone now Harry, we must…

HARRY
He will only be gone from the school when none here are loyal to him.

SCRIMGEOUR
Potter…even Dumbleodre cannot return from the …

HARRY
I’m not saying he can. You wouldn’t understand…but I’ve got nothing to tell you.

SCRIMGEOUR
The ministry can offer you all sorts of protection Harry. I would be delighted to place a couple of my aurors at your service…

HARRY
(Laughs)
Do you think a couple of aurors are gonna stop Voldemort from trying to kill me? Thanks, but no thanks.

SCRIMGEOUR
So the request I made of you at Christmas…

HARRY
The one where I tell the world what a great job you’re doing in exchange for…

SCRIMGEOUR
For raising everyone’s morale!

HARRY
(He pauses)
Released Stan Shunpike yet?

SCRIMGEOUR
Well…I see you are…

HARRY
Dumbledore’s man through and through, that’s right.

He winks and walks away with a smile on his face.

EXT. THE BLACK LAKE-SUNSET (MINUETES LATER)

The scene cuts to him standing on the edge of the lake looking out into it. Hermione and Ron walk up behind him slowly and stand behind him looking out at the lake aswell.

HERMIONE
I can’t bare the idea that we might never come back. How can Hogwarts close?

RON
Maybe it won’t. We’re not in any more danger here than we are at home, are we?

HARRY
I’m not coming back even if it does reopen.

HERMIONE
I knew you were going to say that.

HARRY
I’m going back to the Dursley’s once more, because Dumbledore wanted me to. But it’ll be a short visit, and then I’ll be gone for good.

HERMIONE
But where will you go if you don’t come back to school?

HARRY
I can visit my parent’s graves; I’d like that. Then I’ve got to track down the rest of the Horcruxes, haven’t I ? That’s what he wanted me to do. Then I go after Voldemort and if I met Snape along the way, so much better for me, so much worse for him.

There is a brief silence amongst them.

RON
We’ll be there.

HARRY
What?

RON
At your aunt and uncle’s house and then we’ll go with you wherever you’re going.

HARRY
No…


HERMIONE
You said to us once before that there was time to turn back if we wanted to. We’ve had time, haven’t we?

RON
We’re with you for whatever happens mate.

Harry smiles as he puts his arms around them both as they start to walk back towards the castle.The camera slowly backs away from them and off showing a shot of Hogwarts and the sunset. The screen fades to black and end credits begin

-The End-
Now I KNOW what some of you are going to say Remember this was all pre OOTP movie and DH book so I just threw things in because I thought they'd be important

Thanks for reading everyone

Also here's a list of everything I cut out for anyone who cares (And notice how OFF I was on some very IMPORTANT things that I thought wasn't needed)

CUTS:

-MUNDUNGUS FLETCHER
-FINAL QUIDDITCH MATCH
-LUNA’S COMMENTARY
-BUCKBEAK
-ELABORATION OF TONKS AND LUPINS RELATIONSHIP (THERE ARE CLUES)
-RON BEING TRICKED TO THINK HE TOOK FELIX FELICES
-RONS VICTORY IN QUIDDITCH
-THE PRIME MINISTER
-HAGRIDS ANGER TOWARDS THE TRIO NOT TAKING HIS CLASS
-FRED AND GEORGE’S JOKE PENS
-HARRY TRYING TO GET INTO THE ROOM OF REQUIRMENTS TO SEE WHAT DRACO IS UP TOO
-SNAPE TELLING HARRY TO BRING HIS BOOKS TO HIM (AFTER THE DRACO FIGHT)
-HARRY THROWING THE ADVANCED POTIONS BOOK INTO THE ROOM OF REQUIREMENTS AFTER HARMING DRACO
-DRACO LEAVING QUIDDITCH GAME WITH TWO “GIRLS” THAT ARE REALLY CRABBE AND GOYLE IN DISQUISE
-ARAGOG’S FUNERAL
-HERBOLOGY CLASS
-HAGRID AT DIAGON ALLEY
-HARRY’S DISCUSSION WITH MCGONNAGALL AFTER DUMBLEDORE’S DEATH IN DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE
-SPINNERS END
-THE MEMORY WHEN TOM RIDDLE MEETS MORFIN GAUNT
-CHARMS CLASS
-FLUER DELACOUR (SHE IS OF COURSE MENTIONED….SHE’S SACRAFICED FOR BILL WEASLEY INSTEAD)
-DUMBLEDORE AND HARRY VISITING SLUGHORN AND CONVINCING HIM TO WORK AT HOGWARTS


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Re: Fan Scripts: Script your own version of Harry Potter

Thanks for posting the end!

I was going to point out alot of mistakes but since you reminded us how long ago this was made, I won't.

Let me just say Bill and Fleur have no place in this film in my opinion.

I'm happy you are going to use my lines in your script! I'm honored.

Another little note: One of Ginny's character traits is she never cries. It is what Harry loves about her. I would cut her crying if it was me.

Interesting about adding the bit where we see Dumbledore's office with his portrait though I really feel strongly that the film should cut right from Harry finding Dumbledore's body to a montage and then the funeral.

Hermione and Luna explaning what happened during the battle is not nessesary though I do love your idea for voice overs and your characterizations are spot on.

After Dumbledore is killed and Harry is chasing the death eaters through the castle, I wouldn' have any dialog. I'd have the music and battle sounds take over the soundtrack and segue into a fast paced decent down through the castle following the battles here and there. I would keep Greyback attacking Harry though, what a frightning bit! And Harry and Ginny saving each other is cute.

I imagine a free fall dropping camera pan down through the room with many moving staircases with people fighting on the stairs and bodies falling down, the paitnings screaming and dodging spells as the camera would zoom down down down to the bottom where we see Snape and co running out of Hogwarts followed by Harry hot on their heels.

Let me make another suggestion about the revelation of Eileen Prince. I wouldn't have Hermione telling us all about it but Snape during his and Harry's duel:

SNAPE
Not everyone are so PROUD of their fathers, Potter! Not I. I am the Half-Blood Prince! I invented those spells you used against me!

about the Kloves thing with Hermione!

Good work

I can't wait to read the revised script and I'm flattered to hear I've inspired you. That means alot to me.

btw, 'real' life is overrated.


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Amazing, great work. I only read a couple parts that you posted, but I gotta say I loved you take on the Sectumsempra scene and the entire ending portion. You cut some stuff out but kept the essentials. If the movie is anything like your portions of the script that I read I think we're in for a great one.

One thing I really liked about the DD death scene was that you just had him falling backwards off the tower rather than being blasted into the air and falling off like Jo described. I felt this was a slip up on her part because every other time AK is seen they just go limp suddenly.
In fact when I read that scene in the book, I thought for sure DD wasn't dead because they spell didn't perform like AK and figured that it was a set up faked death and Snape didn't mean to harm which is required for the unforgivable curses or simply said a non-verbal spell as well that acted diffently. But the wait you described it left no doubt in my mind that he was dead. Great job.

I'm so excited for this film. And thanks for posting your take on HBP Phrozenone. That must have taken a long time to put together!



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Ironicly, I felt differently about Dumbledore's death. I think that the way it is portayed in the book will make better cinema because it's a visual idea and it's full of symbolism.

I think Jo Rowling being a Christan framed Dumbledore's death at least subconciously to mirror that of Christ metaphoricly. One of Christ's disciples Judas betrayed Jesus and led to him being crucified. In a similar fashion (at least within the self contained story of HBP alone) Snape betrays Dumbledore to his death leading to Dumbledore's christlike posture before he falls off the tower.

I'm not a Christian myself but that imagery is just too powerful to abanden in a film.

Who cares if the AK curse dosen't lift people up? In the movies, Cedric was BLASTED back and Sirius was slowly pushed back.

Sometimes the drama must overtake the logic in the films and at the same time it is adhering to the canon and what Jo Rowling intended in my opinion.


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Ironicly, I felt differently about Dumbledore's death. I think that the way it is portayed in the book will make better cinema because it's a visual idea and it's full of symbolism.

I think Jo Rowling being a Christan framed Dumbledore's death at least subconciously to mirror that of Christ metaphoricly. One of Christ's disciples Judas betrayed Jesus and led to him being crucified. In a similar fashion (at least within the self contained story of HBP alone) Snape betrays Dumbledore to his death leading to Dumbledore's christlike posture before he falls off the tower.

I'm not a Christian myself but that imagery is just too powerful to abanden in a film.

Who cares if the AK curse dosen't lift people up? In the movies, Cedric was BLASTED back and Sirius was slowly pushed back.

Sometimes the drama must overtake the logic in the films and at the same time it is adhering to the canon and what Jo Rowling intended in my opinion.
I see your point. I guess it's just the fact that I'm an engineering student and pay close attention to details as well as being a perfectionist. So when spells are portrayed differently than they were before or they aren't shown correctly in the films I notice that.

I also came to that conclusion mainly because I didn't want to believe Dumbledore was dead. It's the same way I felt after Sirius died, I was like what the heck he only passed through a veil, he's not dead!


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Thank you both so much

Funny story this script...if we're talking a page a minuete like they do the real world....equals a minuet shorter than COS So I have to cut it down ALOT.

I have a few ideas though...hopefully once they're posted (My goal is to get the whole thing up before HBP is released) you'll be excited about them as I was when I thought about them.

I'm also going to challenge myself a bit this time around. I'm actually going to go with what I THINK they're doing with the actual movie and keep it to 3 (maybe) 4 memories and see is it possible to make sense of everything (Yes that means no Gaunts...but trust me guys...something I thought of last night may blow your minds )

It's going to be very different than this one and much shorter hopefully. It's amazing because I'm now on my 4th draft and each one has been SO different. That just goes to show that there are many ways to interpret these books (And now knowing the ending changes ALOT of things) Well I'm off to writing and thank you all SO much for your input because seeing what others think and feel about it helps alot.

And MoD you're the 2nd person to mention to me that about Ginny. I think I had her cry in my DH script (A few pages back if you want to read it...actually...you must...I'm REALLY interested in what you think of that) after Hedwigs Death...so no more tears for Ginny. Jeez


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Thank you both so much

Funny story this script...if we're talking a page a minuete like they do the real world....equals a minuet shorter than COS So I have to cut it down ALOT.
I'm not sure exactly what you mean. What size page are you referring to? Like, it's 160 pages in a Word Processor?

What's wrong with being as long as Chamber of Secrets. I think 2.5 hrs. would be the perfect time for all the Harry Potter movies save maybe GoF and of course DH.

So my opinion would be to cut about 10 min. if it's 160 min., not sure if this is what you meant? Also, Chamber of Secrets seemed too long because it had too many filler scenes.

As MasterOfDeath mentioned, CoS has the best deleted scenes for example. I believe some of these should have been left in while other material that made the final cut should not have. Well, that just my opinion. I look forward to reading the revised script, that'll be interesting to try and predict what Kloves is doing!

EDIT: I mentioned this on on the HBP thread but I'll put it here too if you didn't see it.

I was just reading another few portions of your HBP script and there are a few things that I really loved, altough I think I was reading your first draft so I don't know if these have changed:


- First, I almost kind of like how you left out Spinner's End, it give's it more mystery. But taking the actors into consideration, I think this is too great of an oppurtunity to leave out a scene between Helena and Rickman!!!

- Second, I love how you introduced Slughon quickly and effectively on the train as this saves a lot of time for more important items. Even though I thought the book scene was cool I think it is wasted in the film!

- Second, the DADA scene with Snape is spot on perfection just like in the book. I love where Harry is a smartass and says, "There's no need to call me sir" This must stay in the film!!! You know Rickman will make this scene great in his interaction with Harry!

- Last, Potions class was awesome too. It was short, maybe 2-3 min. but it had the essentials. Only one thing I noticed. You should have thrown in a line or scene where Slughorn hands Harry and Ron the Potions books out of the cupboard. You see, you had Slughorn mention borrowing ingredients but not books. This made is seem really abrupt when all of sudden we see Harry reading scribbled things in the margins and it's like wait a minute, I thought Harry never bought a book? and why is it written it? Well, that's all.


Great Job, it's fantastic!



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Thanks Icbaseball22 Well needless to say this new one I'm writing is going to be opposite since I want to see how many ways I can write it so I'll be included the trip to Slughorn's home this time.

For a special treat I will post what I've done today for you all. It's not much and I'm ready for the criticism. Just playing with idea's at the moment..trying to release my inner Kloves As I said before I'm going to try and take out what we know they've taken out (Or think they have) in the actually HBP movie and see can I make them work. You'll see pretty soon what's missing. Hope you enjoy and if you don't then let me know!

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EXT. SPINNERS END-NIGHT

The screen fades in to a shot of a street sign reading SPINNERS END. The camera slowly pans out to show the FOGGY street and walking through the fog is two cloaked figures walking at a quick pace. The camera follows them up to a DARK HOUSE and one of them reaches out to knock. A LIGHT comes on within the house and the door slowly opens. SEVERUS SNAPE slowly walks out of the door and stares at the two mysterious figures.

SNAPE
Well well look who it is. Come in….

Snape steps to the side as the two figures walk inside the house. He takes a quick look into the foggy streets before closing the door.

INT. DARK HOUSE-MOMENTS LATER-NIGHT

The scene cuts to the hooded figures now taking off their cloaks and we now see that they are BELLATRIX LESTRANGE and NARCISSA MALFOY.

NARCISSA
I’m sorry to disturb you this late at night Severus but I thought it to be the best time…..I have been told to say nothing to anyone but…

BELLATRIX
Then you ought to hold your tongue! Patrticularly in present company! Why won’t you just listen to me sister! What’s done will be done….

SNAPE
Present company Bellatrix? What am I to understand by that?

BELLATRIX
That I don’t trust you Snape as you may very well know!

SNAPE
Charming atleast we share a mutual….dislike…for one another.

BELLATRIX
Why is Harry Potter still alive Snape? 6 years and you could’ve killed him! I can’t believe the Dark Lord has let you live…

SNAPE
This means I’ve given him the necessary answers to why Potter is still alive. Correct me if I’m wrong Bellatrix but it seems to be you don’t agree with the Dark Lord…

BELLATRIX
I spent years in Azkaban for him Snape!

SNAPE
I’m sure you were much help sitting in a prison cell….

BELLATRIX
How dare you!

SNAPE
I’ve followed the Dark Lord’s orders Bellatrix. I’ve played my part well. Dumbledore trusts me and therein lies my great value to the Dark Lord.

Snape glances down at his arm and watches the DARK MARK on his arm as it slightly moves back and forth. Bellatrix frowns and walks to the other side of the room in anger.

SNAPE
So what is it that you need from me Narcissa?

NARCISSA
You of course know of the mission that the Dark Lord has set forth?

SNAPE
I do…

NARCISSA
Severus…my son….my only son. I know this may be too much to ask of you but Severus would you look after him, see he comes to no harm?

Snape stares at her for a second. Bellatrix watches from the other room in silence with a look of fury in her eyes.

SNAPE
It might be possible…for me to help him.

NARCISSA
Will you swear to it? Will you make the Unbreakable Vow?

Bellatrix eyes widen in horror at this question and tears slowly fall from Narcissa’s eyes. Snape stares at her and slowly gets up and walks towards the window. The camera shows the view from outside of the dark house of Snape looking out of the curtain and SWOOSH he closes them. The camera pans up over the house and the title ‘HARRY POTTER AND THE HALF BLOOD PRINCE’ slowly comes towards the screen with the bright moon in the background. The camera continues to pan up over the moon pauses and starts to pan back down.


EXT-PRIVET DRIVE-NIGHT

A WIDESHOT of Privet Drive is now shown as the camera slowly pans closer to the buildings.

DUMBLEDORE
(Voiceover)
Dear Harry, If it is convenient to you I shall call at number four, Privet Drive, this coming Friday at eleven P.M. to escort you to the Burrow, where you have been invited to spend the remainder of your school holidays. If you are agreeable, I should also be glad of your assistance in a matter to which I hope to attend on the way to the Burrow. I shall explain this more fully when I see you. Hoping to see you this Friday, I am, yours most sincerely, Albus Dumbledore

As the voiceover is being read the camera gets closer to the houses and BAM one by one street lights start going out. We see a CLOAKED FIGURE standing in the street. As we get closer we see the figure hold up a DELUMINATOR and CLICK another light flies into it. The camera pans over this figures shoulder and continues to go towards NUMBER FOUR PRIVET DRIVE. The camera goes through the window of HARRY POTTERS room and we see him laying against the window asleep. The DOORBELL rings and Harry snaps out of his sleep quickly and backs up and BAM trips over his packed trunk which is on the floor. HEDWIG hoots as this happens. Harry jumps up and runs out of his room, down the stairs and opens the door with excitement.

EXT-NUMBER FOUR PRIVET DRIVE-SECONDS LATER-NIGHT

Standing there with a smile on his face is ALBUS DUMBLEDORE as he pulls back the cloak he was wearing.

DUMBLEDORE
I’m sorry Harry did I wake you?

HARRY
(Nervous chuckle)
No…of course not…I was wide awake….

DUMBLEDORE
Wonderful! Is there any chance that your Aunt and Uncle are home?

HARRY
No they’ve been gone all day. They’ve been taking Dudley to the doctor a lot. He hasn’t been the same since the dementor attack last year.

DUMBLEDORE
I’m sure that was a horrifying experience. In that case
(He pulls out a letter)
I would ask if you would leave this letter somewhere that they can find it.

HARRY
What is it?

DUMBLEDORE
Just a letter asking if they would be so kind to let you return once more next year. You see Harry fifteen years ago I put a powerful protection over this house and it will continue to hold as long as you can call this house ‘home.’ This magic will cease to operate the moment that you turn seventeen since as you know seventeen the age us wizards become adults.

HARRY
I honestly don’t think they care about that sir.

DUMBLEDORE
Ah I also included a few choice words but I think you’re a little too young to hear that part just yet. Now put this away Harry and I’ll send your bags to the Burrow so we can step out into the night and pursue that flighty temptress, adventure.

Harry smiles as he takes the letter and returns inside.

EXT-PRIVET DRIVE-NIGHT-MOMENTS LATER

The scene fades to Harry and Dumbledore walking down the middle of the street. Someone riding a bike passes by and gives an odd look at them and Dumbledore simply smiles and waves at them. As he waves we notices that the back of Dumbledore’s hand is BLACKENED and SHRIVELED.

HARRY
Sir your hand…what happened to it?

DUMBLEDORE
Ah this. Well I have no time to really explain it now I’m afraid. You have not, of course, passed your Apparition Test am I correct?

HARRY
No sir, I thought you had to be seventeen?

DUMBLEDORE
You do, so you will need to hold on to my arm very tightly.
(Harry grabs Dumbledore’s arm)
Very good, well here we go.

SWOSH they’re gone in a puff of smoke. The scene cuts to Harry holding onto Dumbledore as they’re flying upwards as the world around them is spinning quickly as if they’re in the middle of a vortex. Soon the spinning slows down and SWOOSH it comes to a halt and Dumbledore grabbes Harry before he falls over from the land.

EXT-BUDLEIGH BABBERTON-NIGHT-MOMENTS LATER

Harry dusts his self off as Dumbledore pulls out his wand and looks around. They’re standing in front of a WAR MEMORIAL and Harry pulls on his ears as if to make them pop.

HARRY
So that’s apparition huh? I think I much prefer flying.

DUMBLEDORE
It does take some getting used to I’m afraid. Get your wand out Harry and keep it at the ready.

HARRY
I thought I’m not allowed to use magic outside of school, sir?

DUMBLEDORE
If there is an attack I give you permission to use any counterjinx or curse that might occur to you.

HARRY
I don’t think I need to worry about being attacked tonight sir.

DUMBLEDORE
Oh? Why’s that?

HARRY
Well….ugh…because I’m with you.

DUMBLEDORE
(Smiles lightly)
Ah Harry, you make it so hard to be modest…

They begin to walk slowly through this dark place

DUMBLEDORE
Needless to say Harry the times have become dangerous, as I’m sure you know, since Voldemort has come out into the open.

HARRY
The explosion of The Brockdale Bridge that just happened…do you think…?

DUMBLEDORE
Oh I know it was Lord Voldemort and his Death Eaters Harry. Not even the muggles are safe. Have you noticed how foggy it’s been lately?

HARRY
Yeah I noticed that….

DUMBLEDORE
The Dementors are breeding Harry…yes yes dark times indeed lie ahead for both of us.

HARRY
Sir…where exactly are we?

DUMBLEDORE
Ah yes I forgot to mention it. We’re in the charming village of Budleigh Babberton. We are here to persuade an old colleague of mine to come out of retirement and return to Hogwarts. Ah and here we are!

They stop in front of a SMALL STONE HOUSE. The front door is hanging off its hinges and Dumbledore looks both ways before proceeding through the GATE into the yard towards the door.

INT-STONE HOUSE-NIGHT-MOMENTS LATER

The walk into the house and a scene of total devastation meets their eyes. Things are EVERYWHERE. The camera pans to a grandfather clock that is lying splintered at their feet. Dumbledore turns to go into the living area and Harry follows. Dumbledore raises his wand and the light from the tip shows the walls has something that is darkly red and glutinous spattered across it.

DUMBLEDORE
Not pretty, is it? Yes, something horrible has happened here.

Dumbledore continues to look around the room slowly.

HARRY
Maybe there was a fight and they dragged him off….

Dumbledore glances over to an OVERSTUFFED ARMCHAIR that is sitting in the corner of the room and stares at it for a second.

DUMBLEDORE
I don’t think so….

HARRY
You mean he’s still here?….

Dumbledore quickly walks up to the chair and pokes it with the tip of his wand and the sound ‘OUCH’ is heard.

DUMBLEDORE
Good evening, Horace.

Harry watches as the armchair slowly begins to transform into HORACE SLUGHORN who is now standing there rubbing his stomach where Dumbledore poked him.

SLUGHORN
There was no need to stick the wand in that hard. It hurt! What gave it away?

DUMBLEDORE
My dear Horace if the Death Eaters really had come to call, the Dark Mark would have been set over the house.

SLUGHORN
(Slapping his palm across his forehead)
The Dark mark…knew there was something I forgot.

He pulls out his wand and SWOOSH everything that was destroyed starts to repair itself. Harry stands back as the pictures fly back on the wall, dishes repair themselves, and the broken lamp on the floor repairs itself and lights the room. Slughorn gives Dumbledore a slight frown and looks over towards Harry and notices his SCAR.

SLUGHORN
Oho! Oho!

DUMBLEDORE
This is Harry Potter. Harry, this is an old friend and colleague of mine, Horace Slughorn.

SLUGHORN
(Looking angrily at Dumbledore)
So that’s how you thought you’d persuade me, is it? Well, the answer’s no, Albus!

DUMBLEDORE
Well do you mind if we have a seat atleast?

SLUGHORN
Go ahead!

Harry and Dumbledore both sit down on the small couch and Slughorn sits in a chair opposite them.

SLUGHORN
Now I don’t mean to be rude Albus….

DUMBLEDORE
Yet sadly, accidental rudeness occurs alarmingly often old friend. So how have you been keeping Horace?

SLUGHORN
Not so well. Weak chest. Wheezy. Can’t move like I used to. You must know what I mean Albus you’re older than me!

DUMBLEDORE
You’re quite right my reactions aren’t…..
(Dumbledore holds up his blackened hand and we get a good look at the damage)
What they used to be but on the other hand…

He turns his hand a bit and now we can see a RING with a heavy black STONE that had been cracked down the middle. Slughorn eyes widen at the sight of the ring and Harry stares at it. Suddenly Dumbledore stands up and proceeds to walk out of the room.

SLUGHORN
Are you leaving?

DUMBLEDORE
No, I was wondering whether I might use your bathroom.

SLUGHORN
Oh…second on the left down the hall.

Dumbledore nods and walks quickly out of the room. Slughorn and Harry both sit uncomfortably in silence in the room for a second before Slughorn clears his voice.

SLUGHORN
Don’t think I don’t know why he’s brought you. You look very like your father, except for your eyes. You’ve got….

HARRY
My mother’s eyes, yeah.

SLUGHORN
Yes well your mother, Lily Evans, was one of the brightest I ever taught. I used to tell her she ought to have been in my House.

HARRY
Which was your house?

SLUGHORN
I was Head of Slytherin. Oh now don’t go holding that against me! You’ll be in Gryffindor like her, I suppose? Your mother was Muggle-born, of course. Couldn’t believe it when I found out. Thought she must have been pure-blood, she was so good.

HARRY
One of my best friends is Muggle-born and she’s the best in our year.

SLUGHORN
Yes well I’m sorry I won’t be able to meet her. Taking up a post at Hogwarts right now would be tantamount to declaring my public allegiance to the Order of the Phoenix….

HARRY
You don’t have to join the Order to teach at Hogwarts. Most of the teachers there aren’t. I reckon the staff are safer than most people while Dumbledore’s headmaster, he’s supposed to be the only one Voldemort ever feared, isn’t he?

Slughorn stares at Harry for a moment clearly thinking about what he just said.

SLUGHORN
It is true that He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Names has never sought a fight with Dumbleodre…I may very well be safer closer to Albus…

Dumbledore Enters

SLUGHORN
Oh, there you are, Albus! You’ve been gone a very long time. Upset stomach?

DUMBLEDORE
No, I was merely reading the Muggle magazines. I do love knitting patterns. Well, Harry, we have trespassed upon Horace’s hospitality quite long enough; I think it is time for us to leave.

SLUGHORN
You’re leaving?

Harry jumps up quickly and stands besides Dumbledore

DUMBLDORE
Yes, I think I know a lost cause when I see one. I’m sorry you don’t want the job Horace. Hogwarts would have been glad to see you back again. Our greatly increased security notwithstanding, you will always be welcome to visit, should you wish too! Good bye!

He smiles and proceeds to walk out of the house and Harry follows.


EXT-STONE HOUSE-NIGHT-MOMENTS LATER

Dumbledore and Harry walk outside the house and exit the gate in front of the house. Suddenly we hear Slughorns voice yelling from inside of the house

SLUGHORN
(Off-screen)
All right, all right, I’ll do it! I’ll be wanting a pay rise for this, Dumbledore!

The door of the house SLAMS shut and Dumbledore smiles and continues to walk away from the house as Harry follows.

DUMBLEDORE
Well done, Harry

HARRY
What did I do?

DUMBLEDORE
You showed Horace exactly how much he stands to gain by returning to Hogwarts. Now if you will grasp my arms, let us get you to The Burrow. I’m sure Mrs. Weasley is worried sick.

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Phrozenone, I'm so sorry I didn't look at your third-act HBP stuff sooner, but wow, very nicely done! I mean, there are things I would/will do differently in mine, of course, and some stage directions and dialogue that needs touching up, but you've done a really good job (on the whole as well). I look forward to the next draft. I'm probably way outmatched here. I don't have the time to pick at everything right now, but I'll go through your Spinner's End later tonight, or tomorrow morning; I just wanted to give a complimentary overview now.




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Okay, Phrozenone, I will try not to think of what version of what is better when reading our HBP drafts. You're really off to a great start, and I look forward to more. It's good to read your Spinner's End and Horace Slughorn, not only because the previous draft didn't have them, but also because I see that we both took the same crucial points of the scenes without doing the same thing. It seems MasterOfDeath, lcbaseball22, and I may be replacing ArryGrotter for the moment, so I'll just point out a few details now:

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The camera pans up over the house and the title ‘HARRY POTTER AND THE HALF BLOOD PRINCE’ slowly comes towards the screen with the bright moon in the background.
Oh, that's a better way; what I was picturing was just a possibly-too-abrupt entrance of the title, dissolving into the streetlight on Privet Drive.

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Someone riding a bike passes by and gives an odd look at them and Dumbledore simply smiles and waves at them.
I like that. It's a nice tiny muggle world-magical world moment that also functions as a nice Dumbledore touch and a good way to show us his mangled hand. Simple and elegant.

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DUMBLEDORE
Yet sadly, accidental rudeness occurs alarmingly often old friend.
I love this line, and I'm so glad you fit it in here if you couldn't do Will and Won't.


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(Off-screen)
All right, all right, I’ll do it! I’ll be wanting a pay raise for this, Dumbledore!
Tiny thing: change raise to rise. That's what JKR wrote, and I believe it's somewhat of a Britishism to say rise instead of raise.

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Thanks IenjoyAcidPops and what u said is so true. Every single one of us can take this one story and make each script entirely different. That's what I love about it. Thanks for your input

Now this next section was hard from me. I actually got writers black (Is that possible ) but I'm happy with the outcome so let me know what you think.


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EXT. THE BURROW- DAWN

The scene cuts to a wide shot of THE BURROW and SWOOSH Harry and Dumbledore appear in the middle of the yard. The sky is a light orange as it is now the crack of dawn.

DUMBLEDORE
Well here we are Harry. Now before you proceed inside I’d like to have a word with you.

Dumbledore faces Harry and looks down upon him.

DUMBLEDORE
I am pleased and a little proud at how well you seem to be coping after everything that happened at the Ministry. It was cruel that you and Sirius had such a short time together. Naturally, the loss is devastating….

HARRY
While I was at the Dursleys’ I realized I can’t shut myself away or crack up; Sirius wouldn’t have wanted that would he? People are dying; it could be me next, couldn’t it? And if it is, I’ll make sure I take as many Death Eaters with me as I can and Voldemort too if I can manage it.

DUMBLEDORE
Spoken both like your mother and father’ son and Sirius’s true godson! Also it is my wish that you take private lessons with me this year.

HARRY
Private…! With you? Really?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, I think it is time that I took a great hand in your education.

HARRY
What will you be teaching me, sir?

DUMBLEDORE
(airily)
Oh, a little of this, a little of that. Now lets get you inside, lets not deprive Molly any longer of the chance to deplore how thin you are.

INT. THE BURROW-FRED AND GEORGE’S BEDROOM-AFTERNOON

They begin to walk towards the house as the scene fades to a shot of Harry sleeping. Then BAM the door flies open and Harry sits up quickly in the bed. SWISH the curtains in the room fly open and Harry reaches for his glasses. Standing by the window was RON WEASLEY and walking into the room is HERMIONE GRANGER

RON
We didn’t know you were here already!

HERMIONE
Ron why did you wake him up, I’m sure he’s very tired!

HARRY
No…I was fine Hermione thanks. Alright Ron?

RON
Fine…when did you get here? You were out with Dumbledore? What happened? What did you do?

HERMIONE
Ron let him collect his thoughts first!

HARRY
It wasn’t that exciting. He just wanted me to help him persuade this old teacher to come out of retirement. Did I miss breakfast?

HERMIONE
Yes…it’s noon now. Mrs. Weasley is sending the food up.

HARRY
She didn’t have too….

GINNY WEASLEY walks into the room carrying a tray of food for Harry.

HARRY
Ginny….hey….

GINNY
Hiya Harry. Good sleep?

She places the tray across Harry’s lap.

HARRY
Fine…you didn’t have to bring this up; I’ll just join you all downstairs.

GINNY
Yes well YOU’LL have to tell mum that, she kept insisting that you were exhausted and she reckons you look underfed.

HARRY
Great….

GINNY
Well I’ll take this back downstairs

She grabs the tray and exits and Hermione follows.

RON
Hurry up and get dressed, I’m starving!

Ron exits and Harry smiles as the scene fades to MRS. WEASLEY, Ginny, and Hermione setting the tables in the kitchen. Harry and Ron both run downstairs and Mrs. Weasley runs up to hug Harry.

INT. THE BURROW-KITCHEN-MOMENTS LATER

MRS. WEASLEY
Good morning Harry dear, are you sure you’re well rested? You can sleep the rest of the day if you like...

HARRY
I’m fine Mrs. Weasley really…..

RON
(Sitting down at the table.)
Has dad made it home yet?

MRS. WEASLEY
No, he’s a tiny bit late

She takes a look up at the family clock where all faces are pointing towards “Mortal Peril” now.
RON
It’s been like that for a while, ever since You-Know-Who’s came back into the open.

GINNY
Yes well SOMEONE can help set the table instead of sitting around just eating all the time.

RON
Hey! I was helping Harry out….

GINNY
Yeah I’m sure he needs your help getting dressed Ron.

RON
It’s a tough job….

HARRY
Where are Fred and George?

RON
They’re raking in the Galleons! They have a new shop in Diagon Alley, we should be going there later…

MRS. WEASLEY
I must say I didn’t approve of it at first, but they do seem to have a flair for business. Oh!
(Mr. Weasley’s hand on the clock moves from ‘Mortal Peril’ to traveling)
Your fathers on his way kids!

Mrs. Weasley waves her hand and the bread she was cutting flies on all the plates on the table. Hermione takes a seat by Ron and Ginny takes a seat by Harry. Hermione grabs the Daily Prophet and begins to read.

RON
So anyone we know dead?

MRS. WEASLEY
RONALD WEASLEY!!!!

RON
What!?!

HERMIONE
(sigh)
Honestly Ron. There have been another couple of dementor attacks and a few more disappearances.

GINNY
There’ve been a lot of disappearances…..

RON
Yeah, did you hear? Even Ollivander the wandmaker has gone missing…

There is a knock on the door and everyone looks at it in silence.

MRS. WEASLEY
Arthur, is that you?

MR. WEASLEY
(From outside the door)
Yes, but I would say that even if I were a Death Eater. Ask the question!

MRS. WEASLEY
Oh, honestly Arthur this isn’t necessary…

MR. WEASLEY
The question dear!

MRS. WEASLEY
Fine…what is your dearest ambition?

MR. WEASLEY
To find out how airplanes stay up and now Molly, what do you like me to call you when we’re alone together?

Mrs. Weasley looks over her shoulders and see the kids watching her.

MRS. WEASLEY
(Nervous Chuckle)
Mollywobbles.

MR. WEASLEY
Correct, now you can let me in.

The door opens and MR. WEASLEY walks in and kisses his wife and sits down his briefcase.

MR. WEASLEY
Harry, I didn’t know you were here already. Everything alright?

HARRY
Yes sir

MR. WEASLEY
Well I ran into a few owls on the way and I have a nice little treat for you lot.
(He pulls out of his pocket a stack of mail.)
O.W.L. results are in!

HERMIONE
(She jumps up in excitement)
Are they here already! Feels like I’ve been waiting ages!

Hermione, Ron, and Harry all take there letters from Mr. Weasley and proceeds to open them on the spot.

HARRY
I only failed Divination and History of Magic, and who cares about them?

RON
(Taking a look at Harry’s)
I knew you’d be top at Defense Against the Dark Arts. We’ve done all right, haven’t we? We’re N.E.W.T. students now!

MRS WEASLEY
Well done!

HARRY
And look at this…we don’t have to take Potions anymore. No more Snape…this day is great already!

GINNY
Hermione? How did you do?

HERMIONE
Oh, I….not bad.

RON
Yeah, like you had anything to worry about in the first place.

Hermione shoots Ron a stern look and then notices something hanging out of Harry’s envelope.

HERMIONE
Well look at this.
(She takes it out and stares at it.)
Seems as if Harry is Quidditch captain this year!

RON
Wow! Congrats Harry! …

HARRY
Thanks…

RON
I’ve always wanted to try out for the team…..

GINNY
Awwww now you have to do is break it to Ron that he doesn’t have a chance on the team Harry.…

RON
Funny…

MRS. WEASLEY
Don’t forget that we are traveling to Diagon Alley later…

MR. WEASLEY
Don’t expect it to be the same Harry, its nearly completely empty now. The scare of You-Know-Who’s return has changed a lot of things. Now can I have a few more sausages dear..?

The camera zooms in on Harry looking at everyone eat and give a slight smile as he enjoys the company of his FAMILY. The scene slowly fades to a shot of a BRICK WALL. Slowly the brick wall starts to peel back and the camera pans back to show Harry, Ron, Hermione, Mr and Mrs. Weasley, and Ginny standing in front of it.

EXT. DIAGON ALLEY-LATER THAT DAY

They slowly walk through the opening and the camera pans up to show a mostly empty DIAGON ALLEY. We see MINISTRY OF MAGIC posters all around and black and white photos of Bellatrix Lestrange sneering on them. A lot of the familiar shops were boarded up and there is a dark wizard calling out to them trying to sell something but they hush past. The camera pans down to Harry as he looks into the window of OLLIVANDER’S deserted wand shop. Ron puts his hand on Harry’s shoulder

RON
Come on mate, we’re going to go to Madam Malkin’s and pick up some new robes while Mom, Dad, and Ginny get the books.

Harry nods and follows Ron as the scene fades to:

INT. MADAM MALKIN- SAME DAY

Harry, Ron, and Hermione walk into the shop and pause when they see Draco standing there in a mirror with MADAM MALKIN knelt down threading Draco’s robs.

DRACO
I’m not a child, in case you haven’t noticed, Mother. I am perfectly capable of shopping alone!

She reaches up and brushes Draco’s left arm and he jumps back as if he’s in pain.

DRACO
And watch where you’re sticking that pin, will you!

He looks in the mirror again and notices the trio standing in the doorway and smirks.

DRACO
If you’re wondering what the smell is, Mother, a Mudblood just walked in.

MADAM MALKIN
I don’t think there’s any need for language like that!

She looks back and sees Harry and Ron both have their wands drawn

MADAM MALKIN
And I don’t want wands drawn in my shop either!

HERMIONE
(Grabs both there arms)
No, don’t, it’s not worth it.

Narcissa Malfoy walks from around the corner slowly with a look of fury in her eyes.

NARCISSA
Put those away. If you attack my son I shall ensure that it is the last thing you ever do.

HARRY
Really? Going to get a few Death Eater pals to do us in, are you?

NARCISSA
I see that being Dumbledore’s favorite has given you a false sense of security, Harry Potter. But Dumbledore won’t always be there to protect you.

HARRY
(He looks around the shop)
That’s funny…look at that…he’s not here now! So why not have a go? They might be able to find you a double cell in Azkaban with your loser of a husband!

DRACO
(He turns around suddenly)
Don’t you dare talk to my mother like that, Potter!

NARCISSA
It’s alright Draco. I expect Potter will be reunited with Sirius before I am reunited with Lucius.

Harry points his wand towards her face and she just stares at him with intense hatred in her eyes.

DRACO
Mother…I don’t think I want these robes anymore

NARCISSA
You’re right, Draco. Now I know the kind of scum that shops here…we’ll do better at Twilfitt and Tatting’s.

MADAM MALIKIN
Well, really!

Narcissa grabs Draco by the arm as he throws the robes in Madam Malkins face and they exit. Hermione, Ron, and Harry all look at each other as the scene cuts to the Weasleys, Hermione, and Harry walking down the streets of Diagon Ally.
The camera goes past them to a shop which, compared to the one’s around it, was light and lively. In the window of the shop was a large sign that read “Why Are You Worrying About You-Know-Who? You Should Be Worrying About U-No-Poo- The Constipation Sensation That’s Gripping The Nation!” The camera pans back to them standing in front of the window as Mrs. Weasley grabs her chest.

MRS. WEASLEY
They’ll be murdered in their sleep!

INT. WEASLEY WIZARD WHEEZES-DAY-MOMENTS LATER

They all walk into the shop and we see an assortment of gadgets and boxes. There are boxes labeled Skiving Snackboxes and Nosebleed Nougat. There are boxes of wands, quills which came in Self Inking and Smart Answer varieties. The camera then pans to the front of the store where FRED WEASLEY and GEORGE WEASLEY are standing

FRED
Welcome…

FRED AND GEORGE
To Weasley’s Wizard Wheezes!!

They both walk up and hug their mom and dad. Fred punches Ron on the arm as he walks past him.
HARRY
Nice place guys.

GINNY
(She looks at love potions)
Do these things work?

GEORGE
Certainly they work, for up to twenty-four hours at a time depending on the weight of the boy in question, and the attractiveness of the girl. But we’re not selling them to our sister, not when she’s already got about five boys on the go from what we’ve heard…

GINNY
(Irritably)
Whatever you’ve heard from Ron is a big fat lie.

FRED
Are you or are you not currently going out with a boy called Dean Thomas?

HARRY
You’re dating Dean?

GINNY
Yes I am, what are those?

GEORGE
Pygmy Puffs, Miniature puffskeins, we can’t breed them fast enough.

GINNY
They’re really cute!

FRED
They’re fairly cuddly, yes. But you’re moving through boyfriends a bit fast, aren’t you?

GINNY
It’s none of your business. And I’ll thank you
(She turns to look at Ron who just turned around the corner)
Not to tell tales about me to these two!

RON
WHAT!

Ron is carrying a few items in his hand from around the shop.

FRED
That’s three Galleons, nine Sickles, and a Knut. Cough up.

RON
I’m your brother!

GEORGE
And that’s our stuff you’re nicking. Three Galleons, nine Sickles. I’ll knock off the Knut.

RON
But I haven’t got that much money!

FRED
Well you’d better put it back then, and mind you put it on the right shelves.

Ron frowns and walks away angrily and Harry laughs. He turns around and looks out of the window and sees Draco Malfoy hurrying up the street alone. He looks over his shoulders and hurry’s out of view. Harry leans over to Hermione who is holding one of the Pygmy Puffs.

HARRY
Wonder where his mommy is?

Harry looks over his shoulder and spots Mr. and Mrs. Weasley talking to George and Fred still harassing Ginny.

HARRY
Hermione get Ron and meet me out back. I have my invisibility cloak with me….I think we should see what he’s up too…

EXT. KNOCKTURN ALLEY-MINUTES LATER

The scene cuts to Harry, Ron, and Hermione walking down the street in Harry’s invisibility cloak. We see Draco take a turn down Knockturn Alley and the trio follows. They pause as Draco walks in Borgin and Burkes. They slowly follow him into the store as he is greeted by BORGIN.

INT. BORGIN AND BURKES-MOMENTS LATER

BORGIN
I’m glad that you finally made it here Mr. Malfoy

DRACO
Yeah well it took some time for me to get away from my mother. So where is it?

BORGIN
Right this way…..

Borgin leads Draco to the back of the store and approaches a VANISHING CABINET. Harry, Ron, and Hermione slowly follow them underneath the cloak. Draco slowly opens up the cabinet and looks inside it.

DRACO
Well you know why I’m here….

BORGIN
Indeed

DRACO
Do you know how to fix it?

BORGIN
Possibly, I’ll need to see it, though. Why don’t you bring it into the shop?

MALFOY
I can’t. It’s got to stay put. I just need you to tell me how to do it.

BORGIN
Well without seeing it, I must say it will be a very difficult job, perhaps impossible. I couldn’t guarantee anything.

DRACO
No?

Draco turns to the side and out of view of the trio

DRACO
(Offscreen)
Perhaps this will make you more confident.

The trio stands still and cast side looks at each other. Draco then walks back out in front of the cabinet and stares at it.

DRACO
Tell anyone and there will be retribution. You know Fenrir Greyback? He’s a family friend. He’ll be dropping in from time to time to make sure you’re giving the problem your full attention

BORGIN
There will be no need for…

DRACO
I’ll decide that. Not a word to anyone, Borgin, and that includes my mother, understand? Keep this Vanishing Cabinet safe….

BORGIN
Naturally, naturally

He bows and barely brushes into the trio under the cloak as he walks out of the store. Borgin gives an angry look and closes the Vanishing Cabinet. Harry, Ron, and Hermione then start to exit but they accidently bump into one of the shelves. They pause in horror as Borgin walks in their general direction. He looks around and proceeds to straighten the item on the shelf they bumped into. Harry notices that it’s a bust of a statue with a OPAL NECKLACE around it’s neck. Borgin then goes to the back and the trio slowly walk out of the store. The camara pans back to show a wide shot of Borgin and Botts and slowly fades to Harry, Ron, and Hermione sitting in Ron’s bedroom

INT. THE BURROW-LATER THAT NIGHT

HARRY
I wonder what he wanted with that Vanishing Cabinet.

RON
I don’t know, it sounds like he wanted something fixed.

HARRY
Yeah but the question is what? He needs something fixed and that cabinet is involved in someway.

HERMIONE
It could be anything Harry

HARRY
I know it’s just, Malfoy’s fathers in Azkaban. Don’t you think he’d like revenge?

RON
Revenge? What can he do about it?

HARRY
I don’t know but he’s up to something and I think we should take it seriously. His fathers a Death Eater and….

His stops walking as his eyes widen and Hermione looks at him with a worried look

HERMIONE
Harry? What’s wrong?

HARRY
He’s a Death Eater. He’s replaced his father as a Death Eater!

RON
(Laughing)
Malfoy? A Death Eater? Harry come on now!

HARRY
The Dark Mark. I guarantee that’s what he showed Borgin that we couldn’t see. Borgin was afraid after Draco showed him it on his arm. Do you remember in Madam Malkins? He jumped when she touched his arm….he must’ve just got branded!

RON
Harry I doubt You-Know-Who would let him join….

HERMIONE
Yes and besides we should all get to bed…we’re off to school tomorrow. Goodnight.

Hermione gets up and walks out of the room and Ron gets under his covers while Harry still sits on his bed.

RON
Don’t worry yourself to much about it right now mate…get some sleep.

HARRY
Yeah I guess you’re right.

Harry lays down and takes off his glasses. He turns off the light and the camera focuses on his as the only light shining on him through the window is the moonlight. The camera slowly fades to the next day and we see Ginny, Hermione, Ron, Harry, Mr. Weasley, and Mrs. Weasley all in the kitchen getting ready to head to PLATFORM 9 ¾.

INT. THE BURROW-KITCHEN-NEXT DAY

MRS. WEASLEY
Come on everyone it’s time to go.

They all begin to exit out of the house and Harry pauses.

HARRY
Um…Mr. Weasley…could I have a quick word?

MR. WEASLEY
Sure Harry.

They both walk out of the kitchen and into the living room.

INT. THE BURROW-LIVING ROOM-MOMENTS LATER

MR. WEASLEY
Are you going to tell me where you, Ron, and Hermione disappeared yesterday?

HARRY
How did you….

MR. WEASLEY
Harry, please. You’re talking to the man who raised Fred and George.

HARRY
Right…well….we followed Draco Malfoy. We used my Invisibility Cloak.

MR. WEASLEY
Did you have any particular reason for doing so, or was it a mere whim?

HARRY
I thought Malfoy was up to something. He’d given his mother the slip and I wanted to know why. He went into Borgin and Burkes and was asking Borgin to help him fix something. It had something to do with this old Vanishing Cabinet there.

MR. WEASLEY
Vanishing Cabinet you say?

HARRY
Yes well there’s something else. I think he’s been branded with the Dark Mark. I think he’s replaced his father. When Madam Malkin tried to touch his left arm he jumped about a mile and he showed Borgin something that made him really nervous.

Mr. Weasley stares at Harry for a moment deep in thought

MR. WEASLEY
Harry I doubt You-Know-Who would allow a sixteen year old….

HARRY
Does anyone really know what Vold…I mean You-Know-Who would or wouldn’t do? Isn’t it worth investigating sir? If Malfoy is trying to fix something and needs to threaten Borgin to get it done it could be something Dark or dangerous.

MR. WEASLEY
We already raided Lucius Malfoy’s house when he was arrested Harry. We took away everything that might have been dangerous.

HARRY
I think you missed something.

MR. WEASLEY
Well maybe…

MRS. WEASLEY
(Offscreen)
Come on you too or we’re going to be late!!!

MR. WEASLEY
I think we should go….

Harry nods and we hear the sound of a train

EXT. HOGWARTS EXPRESS-NOON

The scene cuts to a shot of the Hogwarts Express leaving the station. The camera shows Mr. and Mrs. Weasley together waving at the train.

INT. HOGWARTS EXPRESS- NOON

The camera then pans through the window to show Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny walking down the aisle looking for a compartment. He notices Malfoy sitting in a compartment with ZABINI, PANSY PARKINSON, CRABBE, and GOYLE as they walk by.

HARRY
So will you be sitting with us Ginny?

GINNY
I can’t, Harry. I said I’d meet Dean. See you later though.

She waves back to Hermione and Ron and walks off and Harry stares at her as she walks away as if he’s slightly annoyed that she won’t be with them. A compartment door opens and NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM sticks his head out.

NEVILLE
Hi Harry, Ron, and Hermione! You can join us in here if you’d like, we have room!

Harry, Ron, and Hermione enter the compartment with Neville and see’s LUNA LOVEGOOD sitting there smiling up at them.

LUNA
Hello!

HARRY
Luna, hi, how are you?

LUNA
Very well thank you.

After they put up their bags they all have a seat. From outside the window they see a few people staring into the compartment curiously.

RON
What’s their problem?

NEVILLE
They’re staring at us because we’re with Harry. You know since he’s the chosen one and all….

LUNA
Are we still doing D.A. meetings this year, Harry?

HARRY
No point Luna, we’ve gotten rid of Umbridge.

NEVILLE
I liked the D.A. I learned loads from you!

LUNA
I enjoyed the meetings too. It was like having friends.

Harry, Ron, and Hermione all glance at each other uncomfortably as she says this. All of a sudden there is a knock on the door and it slides open. A group of girls open the compartment giggling and ROMILDA VANE steps inside towards Harry

ROMILDA
Hey Harry, I’m Romilda Vane. Why don’t you join us in our compartment? You don’t have to sit with them!

HARRY
Oh I don’t do I? Well they’re friends of mine!

ROMILDA
Why?
(She and her friends laugh)

NEVILLE
It’s ok Harry, you can go…

HARRY
No, these are my friends and I think you should go

ROMILDA
(Surprised)
Are you serious?
(Dissapointently)
Well…Oh, Oh Ok then

She rushed out and closes the door

LUNA
People expect you to have cooler friends than us.

RON
Than you two maybe

Hermione hits Ron in his arm and gives him a stern look

RON
What?

HARRY
You are cool, none of them were at the Minsitry. They didn’t fight with me.

Luna and Neville both smile and Hermione takes out a Daily Prophet and begins to read as Ron bites into some candy. Harry and he looks out of the window with a look of deep thought on his face.

NEVILLE
Are you alright Harry?

HARRY
Yeah, I’m fine…

LUNA
I don’t think so…maybe a Wrackspurt got you?

HARRY
A What?

LUNA
Wrackspurt…they’re invisible. They float in through your ears and make your brain go fuzzy. I thought I felt one zooming around in here.

Luna starts flapping her hands around in mid air. Ron, Neville and Harry look at each other as if they’re trying to hold back a laugh and Hermione raises the Prophet higher so no one can see her reaction. The compartment door opens and a young third year is standing there with an envelope.

STUDENT
I’m supposed to deliver these to Neville Longbottom and Harry Potter.

The students hands it to them and exits.

NEVILLE
What is it?

HARRY
I dunno
(He opens up the letter and begins to read.)
Harry, I would be delighted if you would join me for a bite of lunch in compartment C. Sincerely, Professor H. E. F. Slughorn.

NEVILLE
Who’s Professor Slughorn?

HARRY
New teacher. Well, I suppose we’ll have to go, won’t we?

INT. HOGWARTS EXPRESS-SLUGHORNS COMPARTMENT-MOMENTS LATER

The scene cuts to Harry and Neville walking down the aisle towards Slughorns Compartment.

NEVILLE
I wonder what he wants me for?

HARRY
Guess we’re going to find out

He reaches out and opens the compartment door and sitting there is Zabini, Ginny, CORMAC McLAGGEN and three other students. Slughorn jumps up to greet Harry.

SLUGHORN
Harry, m’boy! Good to see you, good to see you! You must be Mr. Longbottom! Come in come in and have a seat we’re just chatting.

Harry quickly takes a seat next to Ginny and Neville if forced to sit next to Slughorn.

SLUGHORN
Do you know everyone Harry? Blaise Zabini here is in your year of course. This is Cormac McLaggen. This charming young lady tells me she knows you!

Harry and Ginny look at each other and smile

SLUGHORN
So Cormac I happen to know your Uncle Tiberius.

CORMAC
Do you sir?

SLUGHORN
Oh yes yes, splendid wizard he is. I’m sure no doubt you possess many of his varied talents yourself eh?
(Chuckles)
Yes you lot in this room are some of the best. Mr. Longbottoms here parents are well known Aurors. They’re in St. Mungo’s at the moment right son?

NEVILLE
Yes sir….

SLUGHORN
Well we’ll see if some of their flair has past on to you soon enough! Zabini your mother is indeed a rare beauty.

ZABINI
Thank you sir….

SLUGHORN
And Harry Potter! Where to begin with you? “The Chosen One” they’re calling you now! Of course there have been rumors for years, I remember when…well after that terrible night…Lily...James…and you survived and the word was that you must have powers beyond the ordinary…

Zabini gives a little cough and the other Slytherians in the room laugh.

GINNY
Yeah, Zabini, because you’re soooo talented…at posing…

SLUGHORN
Oh dear! You want to careful, Blaise! Saw this young lady perform the most marvelous Bat Bogy Hex as I was passing her carriage! I wouldn’t cross her.
(Chuckles)
Now I hear there was quite a disturbance at the Ministry last year and you were in the thick of it all.

Harry just nods his head slightly

SLUGHORN
So modest, no wonder Dumbledore is so fond of you. Now about this fabled prophecy…

NEVILLE
We never heard the prophecy. It was broken before anyone could hear it.

GINNY
It’s true. I’m sure all this ‘Chosen One’ rubbish is the Prophet making things up as usual.

SLUGHORN
You were both there too? Excellent!

As Slughorn continues to talk Harry catches eyes with Zabini who gives him a frown. The scene then slowly fades

INT-HOGWARTS EXPRESS-HALLWAY-NIGHT

To Neville, Ginny, and Harry leaving Slughorn’s compartment. They turn and walk down the aisles together

NEVILLE
I’m glad that’s over, strange man isn’t he?

HARRY
Yeah, he is a bit.

GINNY
I wonder what class he's teaching

HARRY
Defense Against the Dark Arts I'm sure. How come you ended up in there Ginny?

GINNY
Oh he saw me hex Zacharias Smith, he thought it was really good and invited me to lunch.

HARRY
Well better reason for inviting someone than because their mother’s famous or because their uncle….

He pauses as he notices Zabini is about to re-enter his compartment. Harry looks around to see if anyone else is looking and pulls out his Invisibility Cloak.

HARRY
I’ll see you two later

NEVILLE
But what’re you…

Harry throws the cloak over himself and runs up behinds Zabini who opens the compartment and

INT. HOGWARTS EXPRESS- SLYTHERIAN COMPARTMENT-NOON

Harry slides in before he closes it. Inside the room is Zabini, Goyle, Crabbe, Malfoy, and Pansy Parkinson. Before Zabini can sit down Harry jumps on his seat and jumps up into the luggage compartment and his foot comes from under the cloack for a quick second and he lies down.

ZABINI
What’s going on?

MALFOY
What did Slughorn want?

ZABINI
Just trying to make up to well connected people, not that he managed to find many. He invited Longbottom, Potter, and that Weasley girl!

MALFOY
He invited Longbottom? What’s Longbottom got to interest Slughorn? And Potter, obviously he wanted a look at ‘the Chosen One’ but that Weasley girl! What’s so special about her!

PANSY
A lot of boys like her, even you think she’s good looking don’t you Blaise?

ZABINI
I wouldn’t touch a filthy blood traitor like her whatever she looked like.

MALFOY
Pity, father always said Slughorn was a good wizard in his day, but it seems he’s gone a bit senile. Who cares whose he’s interested in anyways; he’s just a stupid teacher. I mean I might not even be at Hogwarts next year….

ZABINI
Really?

DRACO
Well you never know, I might have moved on to bigger and better things.

PANSY
(Gasp)
Do you mean…him?

DRACO
Mother wants me to complete my education, but personally, I don’t see it as that important these days. When the Dark Lord takes over, is he going to care how many O.W.L.s or N.E.W.T.s anyone’s got?

ZABINI
And you think you’ll be able to do something for him? Sixteen years old and not even fully qualified yet?

DRACO
I’ve just said, haven’t I? Maybe the job he wants me to do isn’t something that you need to be qualified for.

Crabbe and Goyle look at each other and smile.

DRACO
I can see Hogwarts, we’d better get our robes on.

The scene cuts to show the train slowing down to stop. Everyone is leaving the compartment one by one. Draco then pauses and turns back around. He closes the door and lets down the blinds. He then points his wand to where Harry is hidden

DRACO
Petrificus Totalus!

Harry eyes widen as he is frozen and falls out of the compartment on the floor without his cloak. Draco is looking down on him smiling.

DRACO
I thought so. I saw something white flash through the air after Zabini came back. You didn’t hear anything I care about, Potter. But while I’ve got you here…

Draco stomps on Harrys face. Blood is streaming from Harrys nose.

DRACO
That’s from my father. Now lets see….

He grabs the invisibility cloak and throws it over Harry.

DRACO
I don’t reckon they’ll find you till the trains back in London. See you around Potter…or not.

Draco walks out of the compartment and slams the door and we see Harry trapped underneath the invisibility cloak unable to move. The train starts to move under him and we see and hand reached down and pulled the cloak off of him, and the camera pans to TONKS standing there.

TONKS
Wotcher Harry.

She points her wand at him and a flash of red light hits Harry and he’s unfrozen.

TONKS
We’d better get out of here, quickly.

The scene cuts to…

EXT. TRAIN STATION- DUSK

Harry and Tonks walking from the train station and there is a shot of Hogwarts in the distance.

TONKS
Who did it?

HARRY
Draco Malfoy, thanks for….

TONKS
No problem, I can fix your nose if you stand still.
(She points her wand at his nose)
Episkey.

HARRY
Thanks.

TONKS
We can walk up to the school.

She waves her wand in the air and a silver four legged creature erupts from the wand and streaks off towards the castle.

TONKS
I’m sending word to the castle that I’ve got you.

HARRY
Was that a Patronus?

TONKS
(Gives a weak smile)
Yeah….

HARRY
How did you find me?

TONKS
I noticed you hadn’t left the train and I knew you had the cloak. I saw the blinds drawn on that compartment so I thought I’d check.

HARRY
But what are you doing here, anyway?

TONKS
I’m stationed at Hogsmeade with Proudfoot, Savage, and Dawlish to give the school extra protection.

Harry looks over at Tonks and notices that her hair is dark brown and not the shade of purple that it was last year.

HARRY
Your hair….

TONK
Oh…yeah…haven’t been much of a “purple” mood lately I’m afraid.

She looks up at the FULL MOON that is out and sighs. She then looks over at Harry who has a concerned look on his face.

TONKS
Now Harry don’t go worrying about me, I’ll be fine. Look someone’s coming to fetch you.

They stop at the gate of the castle and then we hear a CLICK and the gate slowly opens and the person who walks out into the moonlight is Snape.

SNAPE
Well, well, well. Nice of you to turn up, Potter. Correct me if I’m wrong but isn’t it in the rules that all students report to the opening feast in their school robes?

HARRY
I couldn’t change, I didn’t have my….

SNAPE
There is no need to wait, Nymphadora, Potter is quite….ah…safe in my hands.

TONKS
(Frowning)
I meant for Hagrid to get the message

SNAPE
Yes well Hagrid was late for the start-of-term freast, just like Potter here, so I took it instead. Incidentally I was interested to see your new Patronus. Have fun walking in the…moonlight…won’t you?

She casts an angry look at Snape who takes Harry by the arm and pulls him into the gates before shutting the gate in her face.

SNAPE
I think you were better off with the old one, the new one looks weak.

HARRY
Good night Tonks, thanks for everything!

TONKS
See ya Harry.

She glares at Snape once more and proceeds to walk off into the distance. Snape turns around and walk towards to the castle

SNAPE
Fifty points from Gryffindor for lateness, I think. Another twenty for not being in your school robes at the opening feast.

Harry follows Snape clearly angry at him and the scene fades too

INT. THE GREAT HALL-NIGHT

…Harry walking into the Great Hall with the rest of the students. He sits down between Harry and Ron

HERMIONE
What happened?

HARRY
I’ll tell you later.

The camera pans to Dumbledore standing up and the hall goes silent.

DUMBLEDORE
To our new students, welcome, to our old students, welcome back! Before we begin our banquet, I would like to say a few words. And here they are: Nitwit! Blubber! Oddment! Tweak! Thank You.

There’s a laugh throughout the students as he turns to sit down and we hear MCGONAGALL clear her throat and throw a stern look at Dumbledore

DUMBLEDORE
Oh right
(He turns back around to the students.)
Another year full of magical education awaits you…

HERMIONE
What happened to his hand?

RON
Dunno, but he seems to be off his nutter.

HARRY
His hand was like that when I saw him over the summer. I thought he’d have cured it by now though….

HERMIONE
It looks as if it’s died. But there are some injuries you can’t cure…old curses…

DUMBLEDORE
We are pleased to welcome a new member of staff this year. Professor Slughorn is a former colleague of mine who has agreed to resume his old post of Potions master!

Everyone starts to look at each other and mouth ‘Potions’ in shock and Slughorn stands up and gives a slight wave at the students

RON
Potions?

DUMBLEDORE
Professor Snape, meanwhile, will be taking over the position of Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher.

HARRY
No.... No it can’t be.

The Slytherian table stands up to clap as Snape raises his hand in acknowledgement

HARRY
I thought Slughorn was going to teach defense…we’re not even taking Potions this year Ron!

RON
Well there’s one good thing, Snape’ll be gone by the end of the year.

HERMIONE
What do you mean?

RON
The jobs jinxed you know. No one’s lasted more than a year.

HARRY
Lets keep our fingers crossed for a death…

HERMIONE
Harry!

DUMBLEDORE
Now, as everybody in this Hall knows, Lord Voldemort and his followers are once again large and gaining in strength.

The entire hall goes silent.

DUMBLEDORE
I cannot emphasize strongly enough how dangerous the present situation is. I urge you all, to abide by any securtiy restrictions that your teacher might impose upon you. I trust you to conduct yourselves, always, with the utmost regard for your own and others safety.
EDIT: Also I added an instance where we actually see Snape's Dark Mark in Spinner's End. Thanks to MasterofDeath for suggesting we should SEE the Dark Mark so when Harry is accusing Draco of having one we'd atleast have some idea what it is. Thanks MoD


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Excellent Phrozenone!

I love how you added Snape coming to fetch Harry this time, I knew there was something missing in your last one but I couldn't remember. In addition, an extra scene with Alan Rickman is never a bad thing.

Now, just a few constructive criticisms:

- I could be wrong, but I believe if Kloves keeps the WWW Joke shop scene the whole point of it would be to show the Dark Arts and Defense products such as the Peruvian Instant Darkness Powder, the Shield Attire, and the Decoy Detonators. At least that is what I would like to see if this scene is in. I do love how you kept the U-NO-POO sign though, it's just too good to cut. I laughed so hard when I read that in the book.

- Even though Auror ambitions haven't been mentioned in the movie, I found it somewhat strange that you had a line where Harry says, "And look at this…we don’t have to take Potions anymore. No more Snape…this day is great already!" just because in the book he was disappointed he wasn't going to be able to take NEWT potions since it was required if he was to be an Auror. Also, It would be nice to throw in a line that says Hermione got 11 Owls/all but one Outstanding to emphasize again "she is the best in their year" because she just responded "Oh, all right" and we don't see what she really got.

- I'm not so sure about the over-emphasis on the "Vanishing Cabinet" although I guess it's good for the idiots who don't read the books.

- I guess it's just too hard for me to not compare to the books but I find it odd that Harry was surprised and didn't know where Fred and George were considering he gave them the money to start their business!

Overall though, very very good.

By the way, for each of your versions, approx. how long would the film be?


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Excellent Phrozenone!

I love how you added Snape coming to fetch Harry this time, I knew there was something missing in your last one but I couldn't remember. In addition, an extra scene with Alan Rickman is never a bad thing.[/u][/i]
Thanks! You're exactly right the more Snape the better. I just always felt that scene wasn't needed because I had many other things to put in my other script. In this one however it works. We get a nice Lupin/Tonks hint and we get to see Snape is all he evil glory

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Bring it!

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- I could be wrong, but I believe if Kloves keeps the WWW Joke shop scene the whole point of it would be to show the Dark Arts and Defense products such as the Peruvian Instant Darkness Powder, the Shield Attire, and the Decoy Detonators. At least that is what I would like to see if this scene is in. I do love how you kept the U-NO-POO sign though, it's just too good to cut. I laughed so hard when I read that in the book.
Ah yes I thought about that aswell actually. Trust me like I said this section was hardest because there's SO much that needs to be set up for later but there's that stupid "time" thing . I really just wanted to establish that they have a business and I was going to show alot of their products being smuggled in at Hogwarts throughout the year. If what I'm thinking doesn't play out well then I will surely come back and add to this scene.

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- Even though Auror ambitions haven't been mentioned in the movie, I found it somewhat strange that you had a line where Harry says, "And look at this…we don’t have to take Potions anymore. No more Snape…this day is great already!" just because in the book he was disappointed he wasn't going to be able to take NEWT potions since it was required if he was to be an Auror. Also, It would be nice to throw in a line that says Hermione got 11 Owls/all but one Outstanding to emphasize again "she is the best in their year" because she just responded "Oh, all right" and we don't see what she really got.
Hehe I've already got something planned for that my friend Needless to say (since I'm going by the films now) Movie Harry doesn't know yet that he HAS to take potions...he'll find out in the next posted section you see Ah yes I forgot about Hermione. I remember having them say she got 11 Owls in one of my earlier drafts but it just didn't flow right but you have a point

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- I'm not so sure about the over-emphasis on the "Vanishing Cabinet" although I guess it's good for the idiots who don't read the books
Oh gosh...this part gave me a headache. Honestly I was almost done with the scene. It was almost like in my last script of this (Harry, Ron, and Hermione listening outside using the extendable ears) and then I was trying to think of a way to really set up a mystery you know? Now Harry knows a Vanishing Cabinet is involved but what is it that Draco's trying to fix that involves it? From how I'm thinking about where the story is heading I'm sure (or hoping) the audience 'get's it' before Harry does.

Plus it's the whole 'show don't tell thing' I realized when I posted the Astronomy Tower scene that Draco just mentioning 'Oh there are two Vanishing Cabinets' didn't really hit me like I wanted it too you know?

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- I guess it's just too hard for me to not compare to the books but I find it odd that Harry was surprised and didn't know where Fred and George were considering he gave them the money to start their business!
Ah yes but in the films I'm thinking that Fred and George made the money from selling things in GOF and OOTP. I think the films did a good enough job showing that they have a flair for business so it's not to unbelievable that they've opened their own shop. Movie only fans will see it that way, whereas us book fans know what REALLY happened

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Overall though, very very good.
Oohhhh two very's Thanks so much! After this post I'm gonna get to the next section since I have some ideas I want to play with.

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By the way, for each of your versions, approx. how long would the film be?
Each one has been different. At first I was trying the 2.5 hour mark and that is REALLY hard to do, but I think I can possibly make it this time around. The thing is I was keeping in unecessary things because I didn't know how they'd turn out. This one I know better (atleast I hope).

As I said before the last one was about 163 mins long (Since...technically...a page equals a minuete) So far it has taken me 34 minuets to get to Hogwarts We're hear now so let the fun begin


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Alright everyone I will now post the next part of version 4 of my HBP script. You will notice ALOT of changes in this one. I was trying to figure out what scene to follow up Dumbledore's Speech with and i remembered that they filmed a scene with McGonagall telling Harry about his classes so I put that in. I opened with Neville since he doesnt have much to do and I like this little moment between him and McGonagall. Also you will get to see the first memory and I really hope you all like what I did with it. If not...well I like it Anyways I'll shut up now and as always your comments and criticism is welcomed

Warning. This is a long one

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The scene cuts to a sweeping shot of HOGWARTS during the next day. The scene then cuts to Neville standing in front of PROFESSOR MCGONAGALL in her office. She is looking over a parchment.

INT. HOGWARTS-MCGONAGALL’S OFFICE-NEXT DAY

MCGONAGALL
I’m sorry, Longbottom, but your score simply isn’t good enough to continue to N.E.W.T. level for Transfiguration. I just don’t think you’d be able to cope with the coursework.

Neville lowers his head in shame and McGonagall looks down at him.

MCGONAGALL
Why do you want to continue with Transfiguration, anyway? I’ve never had the impression that you particularly liked it.

NEVILLE
Well my grandmother wants….

MCGONAGALL
It’s high time your grandmother learned to be proud of the grandson’s she got, rather than the one she thinks she ought to have….particularly after what happened at the Ministry.

She gives Neville a smile as he raises his head up in confidence. She hands him back the parchment.

MCGONAGALL
Tell they next student they may enter please.

Neville opens the door and Harry is standing there.

NEVILLE
You can go in Harry.

HARRY
Thanks Neville….

Harry walks in and hands McGonagall a piece of parchment.

MCGONAGALL
Now let’s see here Potter…Potter. I have a question for you. What exactly do you plan on pursuing after you leave Hogwarts?

HARRY
Well I’ve been thinking about it a lot and I think I really would like to be an Auror.

MCGONAGALL
Fine choice, Potter. Well your marks in Defense Against the Dark Arts, Charms, Herbology, and Transfiguration are all fine. I see you haven’t applied for Potions this term; you need that class if you want to pursue being an Auror Potter.

HARRY
Yes well I thought I had to get an ‘Outstanding’ on my O.W.L. to take Potions this year….

MCGONAGALL
You did...when Professor Snape was teaching the subject. Professor Slughorn, however, is perfectly happy to accept N.E.W.T. students with the score you have. Do you wish to proceed with Potions?

HARRY
Yes, but I didn’t buy the books or any ingredients or anything….

MCGONAGALL
I’m sure Professor Slughorn will be able to lend you some. Very well here is your schedule Potter. By the way twenty hopefuls have already put down their names for the Gryffindor Quidditch team. I shall pass you the list in do course.

HARRY
Thanks Professor.

MCGONAGALL
Tell the next student they my come in.

Harry nods and exits.

EXT. DEFENSE AGAINST THE DARK ARTS CLASSROOM-DAY

The scene cuts to the DEFENSE AGAISNT THE DARK ARTS CLASSROOM. There are already a few students are sitting around chatting when Harry, Ron, and Hermione enter.

MALFOY
Potter!

Harry turns to see Draco sitting in the back next to Crabbe and Goyle with a sly smile on his face.

MALFOY
Glad to see you made it alright. How’s your nose?

HARRY
Fine…how’s your left arm Malfoy?

Before Draco can respond we hear a voice from offscreen.

SNAPE
Quiet!

Everyone turns around and standing in the door of the classroom is Snape. Harry, Ron, and Hermione take that seats and everyone else proceeds to take out their books.

SNAPE
I have not asked you to take out your books, I wish to speak to you, and I want your fullest attention.

He begins to walk slowly towards the front of the class as he speaks.

SNAPE
I am surprised so many of you scraped an O.W.L in this subject; I shall be even more surprised if all of you manage to keep up with the N.E.W.T. work. The Dark Arts are many, varied, ever changing, and eternal. Your defenses must therefore be as flexible and inventive as the arts you seek to undo.

He pulls out his wand and SWOOSH the lights go dim and the screen in front of the class lights up with a slideshow of pictures.

SNAPE
These pictures give a fair representation of what happens to those who suffer, for instance…

He waves his hand and the screen in the front of the class shows a witch that is shrieking in agony

SNAPE
The Cruciatus Curse….

There is a quick shot of Neville as he waves his hand again and we see a wizard lying on the ground with a blank expression

SNAPE
Feel the Dementors Kiss

He waves his hand and there’s a bloody mass on the projector

SNAPE
Or provoke the aggression of the Inferius. Now who here can tell me what an Inferi is?

He looks around and only Hermione raises her hand. He looks over her and continues to talk…

SNAPE
Since there is no one…Inferi are corpses. Dead bodies that have been bewitched to a dark wizard biddings. Fire is one of the most effective tools in fighting against them. The Dark Lord has used Inferi in the past, which means you would be well advised to assume he might use them again. Now can someone tell me the advantage of using a nonverbal spell?

Hermione is the only one who raises her hand again. Snape looks around past her but know one else is raising their hand. He sighs and turns back to Hermione.

SNAPE
Very well.….Miss Granger?

HERMIONE
Your adversary has no warning about what kind of magic you’re about to perform, which gives you a split second advantage.

SNAPE
An answer copied almost word for word from The Standard Book of Spells, Grade Six.

We see a shot of Malfoy and his friends laugh.

SNAPE
But correct in essentials. Those who progress to using magic without shouting incantations gain an element of surprise in their spell casting. Not all wizards can do this, of course; it is a question of concentration and mind power which some…..lack

He casts a look over at Harry as he says this.

SNAPE
Now today we will practice on using non verbal spells. Potter…Weasley…to the front of the class and bring your wands.

Harry and Ron cast each other looks before walking up to the front of the class.

SNAPE
Wands at the ready.

Harry and Ron both face each other and put their wands in the ready position.

SNAPE
Now Weasley I want you to attempt to jinx Potter without speaking and Potter must attempt to repel the jinx in equal silence. Carry on.

Snape steps back as Ron points his wand at Harry. Ron’s face begins to strain as he tries to attempt a non verbal spell. There are a few giggles in the back of the class and even Snape looks slightly amused for the moment.

SNAPE
Pathetic, Weasley.

He holds up his wand and pushes Ron to the side.

SNAPE
Here…let me show you

Snape turns quickly and points his wand at Harry

HARRY
PROTEGO!

BOOM the shield reflect Snape’s spell throwing him back across the room. A lot of students jump up in shock. Snape jumps up angrily and walks quickly towards Harry who still has his wand pointed at him.

SNAPE
Do you remember me telling you we were practicing nonverbal spells, Potter?

HARRY
Yes.

SNAPE
Yes, sir.

HARRY
There’s no need to call me ‘sir,’ Professor

The room goes deadly silent and Hermione puts her hand over her mouth in shock. Ron on the other hand has a big grin on his face.

SNAPE
Detention, Saturday night…my office Potter. I do not take cheek from anyone…not even ‘the Chosen One’

The stare at each other for a moment.

SNAPE
Now everyone will team up in pairs and attempt to do what Potter and Weasley failed to do. Carry on…

Everyone in the class stands up and Snape looks at Harry once more before walking away. The camera shows a wideshot of the class as everyone gets into pairs.

INT. HOGWARTS-FIRST FLOOR CORRIDOR-AFTERNOON

The scene cuts to Harry, Ron, and Hermione walking down a hallway. There are a few students walking around holding hands and Ron frowns at one couple as they pass by.

RON
That was brilliant Harry!

HERMIONE
No it wasn’t Ron! Harry what made you say that to him?

HARRY
He tried to jinx me, in case you didn’t notice! What’s Dumbledore playing at, anyway, letting him teach Defense? Did you hear him talking about the Dark Arts? He loves them! All that unfixed, indestructable stuff…

HERMIONE
I thought he sounded a bit like you when you were telling us what it’s like to face Voldemort. You said it wasn’t just about memorizing a bunch of spells.

A group of girls pass by and LAVENDER BROWN waves at Ron with a smile on her face. He looks around and then mouths ‘Me?’ to her and she nods yes. He chuckles and waves back and her friend’s walk away giggling. Hermione roll her eyes as KATIE BELL runs up behind them with a letter in his hand.

KATIE
Harry! Hey, Harry!

She hands Harry the letter

KATIE
For you! Listen, congrats on making captain for the team. Tell me when you call trials!

HARRY
Don’t be stupid Katie; you don’t need to try out. I’ve watched you play for five years…

KATIE
You mustn’t start off like that, good teams have been ruined before because Captains just kept playing the old faces and letting in their friends. Gotta run though, see ya!

As Katie leaves Harry notices CHO CHANG walking down the hall with a few friends. A look of regret shows on Harry’s face.

HARRY
I’ll be back guys….

Harry runs up to Cho who looks surprised that he’s approaching her.

HARRY
Cho….can I have a word?

CHO
Oh…um…yeah sure Harry…

Her friends walk away and Harry takes a deep breathe before he speaks.

HARRY
Listen, I’m sorry about what happened last year. I found out that Umbridge used Veritaserum on you and that’s why you revealed everything about Dumbledore’s Army. I’m sorry it’s taken me so long to get back to you….

CHO
No…no…it’s ok Harry…really. I would’ve been mad if I were you aswell.

HARRY
It’s just…I still want to be friends…if that’s fine.

CHO
I’d like that

Cho’s friends call her from behind and she looks back and holds up one finger.

CHO
Well I guess I should go…I’ll see you around Harry.

She holds out her and hand and Harry grabs it as they shake hands and she walks away. Ron and Hermione walk up behind him.

HERMIONE
That was really nice of you Harry….

RON
So does this mean no more snogging between you two?

HARRY
Funny Ron…but no…I have my eye on someone else…

RON
Who?

HARRY
Oh…um…

HERMIONE
So what does that letter say that Katie gave you Harry?

Harry looks at Hermione thankful for the interference and opens the letter.

HARRY
It’s from Dumbledore; he wants me to meet him in his office on Saturday for the private lessons.

RON
Snapes not going to be pleased, you won’t be able to go to detention

HARRY
All the better then.

HERMIONE
Come on we’re almost late for Potions….

INT-POTIONS CLASSROOM-EVENING

The scene cuts to Slughorn pacing in front of the class.

SLUGHORN
Now then! Scales out, everyone, and potion kits, and don’t forget your copies of Advanced Potion Making (Harry raises his hand) Yes Harry?

HARRY
I haven’t got a book or scale or anything…nor’s Ron…we didn’t realize we’d be able to do the N.E.W.T., you see…

SLUGHORN
Oh yes, Professor McGonagall mentioned this to me. Not to worry, you can use ingredients from the store cupboard today. I’m sure we can lend you some scales, and we’ve got a small stock of old books here, they’ll do until you can get some new ones.

He walks over to the cabinet opens it and pulling out two old ADVANCED POTION MAKING books. He hands one to Harry and the other to Ron and walks back to the front of the class.
SLUGHORN
Now, I’ve prepared a few potions here for you to look at, just out of interest, you know. These are the kind of things you ought to be able to make after completing your N.E.W.T.s. Can anyone tell me what this one is?

Hermione raises her hand.

SLUGHORN
Yes, dear?

HERMIONE
It’s Veritaserum, a colorless, odorless potion that forces the drinker to tell the truth.

SLUGHORN
Very good! Now can anyone tell me what this one…

HERMIONE
It’s Polyjuice Potion, sir.

SLUGHORN
Excellent! Now this one….

HERMIONE
It’s Amortentia. It’s the most powerful love potion in the world.

SLUGHORN
Quite right! May I ask your name, my dear?

HERMIONE
Hermione Granger, sir.

SLUGHORN
Granger? Can you possibly be related to Hector Dagworth-Granger, who founded the Most Extraordinary Society of Potioneeers?

HERMIONE
No sir, I’m Muggle born.

SLUGHORN
Oho! I’m assuming this is the very friend of whom you spoke about that is the best of your year, Harry?

HARRY
Yes, sir.

He looks at Hermione as she smiles embarrassingly.

SLUGHORN
Lovely, I say Twenty Points for Gryffindor! And now, it is time for us to start work.

NEVILLE
Sir, you haven’t told us what’s in this one!

SLUGHORN
Oh yes, well that one is a most curious potion called Felix Felicis. I take it that you know what Felix Felicis does, Miss Granger?

HERMIONE
It’s liquid luck. It makes you lucky.

Everyone in the class murmers with excitement.

SLUGHORN
Quite right. It’s desperately tricky to make, and disastrous to get wrong. However, if brewed correctly, as this has been, you will find that all your endeavors tend to succeed…at least until the effects wear off.

DEAN
Why don’t people drink it all the time, sir?

SLUGHORN
Because if taken in excess, it causes giddiness, recklessness, and dangerous overconfidence. Too much of a good thing, you know.

SEAMUS
Have you ever taken it, sir?

SLUGHORN
Twice in my life. Now, one tiny bottle of Felix Felicis is the prize I’m giving away at the end of this lesson. Enough for twelve hours luck! Now turn to page ten of Advanced Potions Making and you will attempt to make a decent Draught of Living Death.

Everyone opens there book. Harry lazily opens his and the camera goes to show that there are a lot of small notes written by the previous owner.

HARRY
Ron…look at this….whoever had this book last wrote an alternate way to do this. Do you think I should follow it?

RON
Dunno…you can try right?

HARRY
Yeah…..

The scene fades to moments later where every student has a cauldron bubbling with potion in front of them. Harry is still following what’s in the margins and Hermione looks at him in anger when his potion seems to be coming further along than hers.

HERMIONE
How are you doing that?

HARRY
Add a clockwise stir…

HERMIONE
No, the book says counterclockwise!

SLUGHORN
And times up!

He starts to walk around the room looking at the potion and stops at Harry

SLUGHORN
The clear winner. Excellent, Harry. It is clear you’ve inherited your mother’s talent. Here you are then, one bottle of Felix Felices.

Harry smiles and Hermione sends an angry glare at him as the scene fades to…

INT. GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-EVENING

Harry and Ron are sitting playing WIZARDS CHESS and Hermione and Ginny enters into the Common Room. Hermione angrily walks up to Harry.

HERMIONE
How did you do that?

HARRY
Do what?

HERMIONE
You know what! Today in potions! How did you make a Draught of Living Death so perfectly?

HARRY
Good luck, I suppose. What is it? You think I cheated?

HERMIONE
Well it wasn’t exactly your own work, was it?

RON
He only followed different instructions to ours. Could’ve been a catastrophe but he took the risk and it paid off! Slughorn could’ve handed me that book, but no, I get the one no one’s ever written on. Puked on, by the look of page fifty two...

GINNY
Hang on…you’ve been taking orders from something someone wrote in a book Harry?

HARRY
Yeah, I just tried a few tips written in the margins! It….

He glances around to make sure no one else is listening

HARRY
It’s not like Riddle’s diary from my second year Ginny I promise.

GINNY
But you’re doing what it says?

HERMIONE
We ought to check that there’s nothing odd about it. I mean...

She pulls out her wand and grabs the book from Harry and points the wand at it.

HERMIONE
Specialis Revelio!

Nothing happens

HARRY
Finished? Or d’you want to wait and see if it does a few backflips.

HERMIONE
It seems all right.

HARRY
Good. Then I’ll have it back.

RON
Well this game is ruined…guess I’m off to bed…

HARRY
Yeah me too…I have my meeting with Dumbledore tomorrow. Night guys!

GINNY and HERMIONE
Night!

They all exit and Harry forgets he left the book on the table and turns back to fetch it. He picks it up and looks down at it and notices something written on it. The camera zooms in to show the writing which says ‘This Book is the Property of the Half-Blood Prince’.

INT-DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-NIGHT

The scene fades to the SPINNING GARGOYLE that leads to Dumbledore’s Office. Harry slowly opens the door to DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE. The camera slowly pans around the room to show the POTRAITS on the wall asleep and Dumbledore’s PENSIEVE glowing with a light blue light. The camera continues to pan to Dumbledore who is sitting on the steps in front of his desk examining his damaged hand. As Harry walks forward Dumbledore lowers his hand and smile.

DUMBLEDORE
Ah Harry, right on time!

HARRY
Good evening sir.

DUMBLEDORE
You have been wondering, I am sure, what I have planned for you during these lessons?

HARRY
Does what you’re going to tell me have anything to do with the prophecy?

DUMBLEDORE
Ah the prophecy. I’m glad you brought that up Harry. When you picked up the prophecy last year you heard it being given in your head am I correct?

HARRY
Yes sir….

DUMBLEDORE
The prophecy you heard last year was made by none other than Professor Trelawney.

HARRY
Trelawney?

DUMBLEDORE
(chuckles)
Seems a bit unbelievable?

HARRY
How do you know it was her sir?

DUMBLEDORE
I was there when she made it. You see I was interviewing her for the teaching post here. Unfortunately we were interrupted…..

Dumbledore pauses a look of regret showing on his face for saying that. He stands up suddenly and walks up to his desk and starts looking through the papers on it.

HARRY
By who sir?

DUMBLEDORE
That isn’t important at the moment I’m sorry to say…

HARRY
Did this person hear what she said? Was this….person…the one who told Voldemort about the prophecy? Are they the reason my parents are dead?

Dumbledore looks up at Harry and sighs.

DUMBLEDORE
I’m sorry to say that in some way they are…..

HARRY
Sir I think I have the right to know….

DUMBLEDORE
I’m sorry Harry but we have more things to discuss right now…Ah!

He picks up a piece of parchment and walks down the steps and hands it to Harry.

HARRY
What is this sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Sirius’s will. He left you Grimmauld Place and everything in it.

HARRY
He left me his house?

DUMBLEDORE
He also sent Kreature, his house elf, here to work in the kitchens for some time with the other house elfs last year because he was tired of hearing him muttering around the house. You own him aswell. If you need him just simply call out his name and he will appear.

Dumbledore walks over to the pensieve as Harry stares down at Sirius’s will. Dumbledore puts the tip of his wand on his temple and pulls out a LIGHT BLUE STRING and tosses it into the Pensieve. He then turns around to face Harry, the light from the Pensieve shines brightly on his face.

DUMBLEDORE
The reason I’m holding these lessons Harry is to give you a look into Lord Voldemort’s past. I think important things lie there that will ultimately help you defeat him in the end. Now if you please….

Harry walks up into the Pensieve and looks down at his contents. Swirling in it seems to be an image of an old building. Harry leans forward and SWOOSH the room dissolves and Harry is now standing by a much younger Dumbledore who is standing a street. The camera pans over to show an old ORPHANAGE standing in front of them. The younger Dumbledore walks into Harry but Harry goes THROUGH him. Harry slowly follows Dumbledore as he opens the gate to the Orphanage and approaches the door.

INT. THE ORPHANAGE-MAIN HALL-PAST-NIGHT

Dumbledore walks into the old building which looked shabby but is spotlessly clean. Dumbledore walks down the hall and they see a few orphans walk by. Dumbledore turns and enters an office.

INT. ORPHANAGE-MRS. COLES OFFICE-MOMENTS LATER

Dumbledore walks into the room followed by Harry. MRS. COLE is filing through some paperwork and when she looks up seems a bit shocked by Dumbledore’s appearance.

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
Mrs. Cole? Hello, my name is Albus Dumbledore. I am a teacher and I have come to offer Tom Riddle a place at my school.

MRS. COLE
And how come you’re interested in Tom?

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
We believe he has qualities we are looking for. I think this will make everything clear.

He hands Mrs. Cole a piece of parchment and as she looks down at it Dumbledore waves his wand and he eyes become slightly glazed over and clear again and she looks back up at him.

MRS. COLE
This looks in order.

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
Yes well I was wondering whether you could tell me anything of Tom Riddle’s history? I think he was born here in the orphanage?

MRS. COLE
That’s right, it was a nasty night. This girl, not much older than I was myself at the time, came and we took her in. She had the baby in an hour and she was dead in another hour. She told me he was to be named Tom for his father, and Marvolo, for her father and his surname was to be Riddle. She died soon after that without another word.

She looks both ways and then leans in a little closer to Dumbledore

MRS. COLE
(Whispers)
He’s a funny boy.

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
Oh really, how so?

MRS. COLE
Well…he scares the other children.

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
You mean he’s a bully?

MRS. COLE
I think he must be but it’s very hard to catch him at it. For instance we took them out once to the seaside for a summer outing. Amy Benson and Dennis Bishop were never quite right afterwards, and all we ever got out of them was that they’d gone into a cave with Tom Riddle.

DUMBLEDORE
A cave?

MRS. COLE
Yes and he swore they’d just gone exploring, but something happened in there, I’m sure of it. He’s also the only child with a room to themselves, all the other children are afraid to stay with him.

DUMBLEDORE
Is that so? Well would you be so kind to direct me to Tom’s quarters?

INT-ORPHANAGE-TOMS BEDROOM-MOMENTS LATER

The scene cuts to Mrs. Cole opening a door and walking in. Young Dumbledore follows and Harry walks in behind him. He looks and sitting in a bed reading a book in front of him is a young TOM RIDDLE. His room contains only a wardrobe and an iron bedstead

MRS. COLE
Tom you’ve got a visitor. This is Mr. Dumberton…sorry, Dunderbore. Call me when you’re done.

Mrs. Cole flashes Dumbledore a quick smile and exits closing the door behind her.

DUMBLEDORE
How do you do, Tom? I am Professor Dumbledore.

TOM
Professor? What are you here for? Did she get you in to have a look at me?

DUMBLEDORE
No, in fact I contacted her.

TOM
I don’t believe you. She wants me looked at, doesn’t she? Tell the truth!

DUMBLEDORE
I have no reason to lie to you Tom and please watch your tone. I work at a school called Hogwarts. I have come to offer you a place at my school, if you would like to come.

TOM
You’re from the asylum aren’t you? That old cat’s the one who should be in the asylum. I never did anything to little Amy Benson or Dennis Bishop, you can ask them!

DUMBLEDORE
I am not from the asylum. Hogwarts is a school for people with special abilities…

TOM
I’M NOT MAD!

DUMBLEDORE
I know that you are not mad. Hogwarts is not a school for mad people. It is a school of magic.

Tom seems taken aback by these words and stares at Dumbledore for a moment and a smile slowly forms on his face.

TOM
Magic…it’s magic what I can do?

DUMBLEDORE
What is it that you can do?

TOM
All sorts. I can make things move without touching them. I can make animals do what I want them to do, without training them. I can make bad things happen to people who annoy me. I can make them hurt if I want to. I knew I was different…special. Are you a wizard too?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes, I am.

TOM
Prove it.

DUMBLEDORE
If as I take it you are accepting your place at Hogwarts….

TOM
Of course I am!

DUMBLEDORE
Then you are to address me as ‘Professor’ or ‘sir’

Dumbledore takes out his wand and points in at the wardrobe in the corner. BANG! It bursts into flame. A big smile forms across Tom’s face as the wardrobe slowly burns before SWOOSH Dumbledore waves his wand and its back to normal.

TOM
Where can I get one of them?

DUMBLEDORE
All in good time, I think there is something trying to get out of your wardrobe. Open the door.

Tom hesitates and then walks over and opens the wardrobe door. He pulls out a cardboard box that is shaking. He opens it and in it lies a yo yo, a silver thimble, and a tarnished mouth organ in it.

DUMBLEDORE
Is there anything in that box that you ought not to have?

Tom nods his head.

DUMBLEDORE
You are to return them to their owners with your apologies. And be warned: Thieving is not tolerated at Hogwarts. Hogwarts can expel students and the Ministry of Magic will punish lawbreakers. All new wizards must accept that, in entering our world, they abide by our laws.

TOM
Yes, sir. There’s one problem though… I don’t have any money.

YOUNG DUMBLEDORE
There is a fund at Hogwarts for those who require assistance to buy books and robes.

TOM
Where do you buy spellbooks?

DUMBLEDORE
In Diagon Alley, I can help you find everything…

TOM
I don’t need you; I’m used to doing things for myself. How do you get to this Diagon Alley…sir?

DUMBLEDORE
You will be able to see it. Ask for Tom the barman…

Tom frowns at the mention of the name.

DUMBLEDORE
You dislike the name ‘Tom’?

TOM
There are a lot of Toms. Sir…did you know my parents? Or anything about my family? Were they great wizards?

DUMBLEDORE
Ah I know of them Tom yes. I’m sorry to say I don’t know much about your father however, I think he is a muggle.

TOM
Muggle?

DUMBLEDORE
Non magic people.

TOM
You mean my father….the man I’m named after…is nothing?

Dumbledore stares down at Tom who looks a mixture of disappointment and anger.

DUMBLEDORE
Tom being half blood doesn’t make you any less of a wizard.

TOM
I wish I wasn’t. I hate this name Tom and I hate my father! Mrs. Cole told me my mother died after giving birth to me. I killed her.

DUMBLEDORE
Tom that wasn’t your fault…

TOM
I’d like to think it was. Serves her right for being involved with a…what did you call it…muggle.

DUMBLEDORE
I don’t ever want to hear you speak of such prejudice again Tom do you understand? If your mother was in love then….

TOM
Love is for the weak. No one has ever loved me…well…no one except….

He walks behind his bed and pulls out a small little case. He opens it and reaches his hand inside of it and a small SNAKE slithers out onto his hand.

TOM
This is my only friend in the world. I named her Nagini, I found her in a cave near here.

DUMBLEDORE
Yes I was going to ask you about this cave Tom….

TOM
I like it there. There are lots of places to discover and hide things. There are times I’d much rather be there than here.

Harry notices a DRAWING that is on the wardrobe door of a ledge surrounded with water below and a dark opening. Tom begins to stroke Nagini’s head and starts to speak PARSELTONGUE. Dumbledore’s eyes widen in shock.

DUMBLEDORE
You can speak to snakes?

TOM
Yes. Is that normal for a wizard?

DUMBLEDORE
It is unusual, but not unheard of. Well it looks my time is coming to a close Tom. All the details are there in this parchment. You will leave from King’s Cross Station on the first of September. Good bye Tom…I shall see you in Hogwarts.

Dumbledore turns to leave and Harry stands and stares at young Tom Riddle as he continues to talk to Nagini and SWOOSH the room dissolves and we’re back in Dumbledore’s Office.

INT. HOGWARTS-DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-NIGHT

Dumbledore has his hand on Harry’s should and Harry looks up at Dumbledore.

HARRY
Wow…he was a….interesting kid.

DUMBLEDORE
Indeed he was. Now Harry there are a few things of note I want you to take from that memory. Did you notice how Tom liked to collect trophies? You saw the box of stolen articles am I correct? These were taken from the victims of his bullying behavior. Bear in mind this magpie-like tendency, for this, particularly, will be important later.

HARRY
He seemed to be well developed in magic to not know he was a wizard.

DUMBLEDORE
Yes. He was already using magic against people, to frighten, to punish, to control. The story of the young boy and girl he lured into a cave were most suggestive…

HARRY
He immediately hated anything to do with half bloods.

DUMBLEDORE
Ah yes even at that age Tom considered anyone without magical powers weak. If you noticed he hated the name Tom before he knew it belonged to his muggle father since it was so common. Of course he would soon change his name to one that many fear to speak to this day.

HARRY
Is it important for me to know about Voldemort’s past sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Very important I think Harry. Did you notice how attached he was to his pet snake Nagini?

HARRY
Yes sir….he said it was his only friend. Do you think that’s still the case sir?

DUMBLEDORE
Yes Harry I do…well it seems the hour is late. I will send for you when the time comes!


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Phrozenone, that was incredible, pure genious! You tied up the loose ends very well. I love how you threw the Auror ambition in there, Harry apologizing to Cho, Sirius' Will, and Dumbledore explaining about Trelawny (was this in the book? I see now that Trelawny is not neccessary as some are suggesting. Just have DD relay the info to Harry and that Snape is the one to overhear.)

Thanks for taking my advice and adding to the Potions scene and the Half-Blood Prince book. It was brilliant!

Not sure if this is possible, I don't know if you changed anything but the DADA scene with Snape seemed even better than last draft!!!

Yes, I think what you did with the first memory was awesome!
Did we see Nagini in the book? (It's been too long, I can't remember)

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So does this mean no more snogging between you two?

HARRY
Funny Ron…but no…I have my eye on someone else…

RON
Who?

HARRY
Oh…um…
Nice job with the hinting. Ron is oblivious.

Sorry, I unfortunately don't have any criticism for you this time. It was great.

Let's just hope Kloves does it similar. It's too bad you're not our scriptwriter!



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Ginny and Harry get together long before the end of DH and she is invoilved in the final action with him and secrets are revealed about her that effect the final outcome of the story....haha


I just made all of that up IDK what I would like alot of things..


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Phrozenone, that was incredible, pure genious! You tied up the loose ends very well. I love how you threw the Auror ambition in there, Harry apologizing to Cho, Sirius' Will, and Dumbledore explaining about Trelawny (was this in the book? I see now that Trelawny is not neccessary as some are suggesting. Just have DD relay the info to Harry and that Snape is the one to overhear.)

Thanks for taking my advice and adding to the Potions scene and the Half-Blood Prince book. It was brilliant!

Not sure if this is possible, I don't know if you changed anything but the DADA scene with Snape seemed even better than last draft!!!

Yes, I think what you did with the first memory was awesome!
Did we see Nagini in the book? (It's been too long, I can't remember)
Thanks Icbaseball22!!!

Sorry it's taken me so long to reply. You thought I'd forgotten about your statement about the Potions book huh

I changed the DADA scene a bit actually (also it's further back than originally) and I like it. Nagini wasn't there in the book it was one of those things I added because I thought it would add to the scene (Plus we get to see a Horcrux ) I'm glad you like the memory though because I was really trying to make it flow...but not drag...and really show how disturbed little Tom Riddle was.

Also I made an Edit to the scene in Borgin and Burke's and I have the trio now bumping into a shelf..which in turn holds the very necklace that will come into play later. I thought I should introduce it now instead of having the audience try to think back to Harry seeing it his 2nd year (Did that make it in the film? I think it was a deleted scene)

I will be posting the next section very soon. I've taken some time off to really think through how I want the next section to go (Seeing as Quidditch Tryouts are coming up and I've always been afraid to actually write out Quidditch )

Thanks for reading my script though I REALLY appreciate it and as an added treat the next section will be longer (To make up for the time I've missed )

Hmmm well I take it back I guess I'll be posting today instead I'm not sure if it's as long as I wanted but here is the next section for all those who care

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Harry nods and the camera pans over to a overhead shot of the Pensieve. Inside we see the reflection of Tom Riddle with Nagini around his neck smiling up at us. The scene fades to

INT. GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-NIGHT

Harry sitting next to the fireplace while Hermione and Ron sit in the couch in the common room.

RON
You mean to tell me Trelawney is the one who made the prophecy?

HERMIONE
That seems so…..

HARRY
Unbelievable yeah…I want to know who interrupted them though.

HERMIONE
I’m sure Dumbledore will tell you in time.

RON
Doubt it. I mean here I am thinking Dumbledore was going to teach Harry advanced magic and he’s just showing you memories of You Know Who as a kid. I mean what’s the point in that?

HERMIONE
I think it’s fascinating actually. It makes total sense to know as much about Voldemort as possible, how else will you find out his weaknesses?

RON
Yeah well atleast you know you have a house now and you got a house elf that has to do whatever you tell him too. You should get him to clean our room…

HERMIONE
Ron that’s a horrible thing to say!

RON
What?

HERMIONE
House elves have as much rights as we do!

RON
Yeah…the right to clean…cook…or whatever else we want them to.

Hermione looks at Ron with disgust. She gets up and walks off and Ron looks back confused.

RON
Did I say something?

Harry shrugs and the scene cuts to a shot of the dark boys dormitory.

INT. BOYS DORM-HOURS LATER-NIGHT

The only light in the room is the tip of Harry’s wand. The camera cuts to show him reading out of his Advanced Potions Book. The camera shows the writing in the book as Harry’s wand slowly goes down the page looking at them.

HARRY
Strange…it looks like the prince made up his own spells.

Harry continues to read and waves his wand a BAM there is a flash of light and a CRASH. Neville, Seamus, and Dean all jump up as the camera turns to show Ron hanging upside down screaming.

RON
Get me down!! Get me down!!!

Neville, Dean, and Seamus all laugh

HARRY
Oh..um…sorry Ron. Hang on…I’ll let you down… let me find the counter-curse!

He grabs for his book and looks through the pages. He drops the book and points the wand at Ron. There’s a flash of light and Ron falls to his mattress.

HARRY
Sorry about that….was just trying out one of the prince non verbal spells.

RON
(In an exhausted voice)
Tomorrow, I’d rather you set the alarm clock.

INT-HOGWARTS-THE GREAT HALL-MORNING

The scene cuts to a shot of Hogwarts and follows an owl through the Great Hall. The camera then pans down to Harry, Ron, and Hermione at the Gryffindor table.

HERMIONE
So you just decided to try out an unknown, handwritten incantation and see what would happen?

HARRY
Why does it matter if it’s handwritten?

HERMIONE
Because it’s probably not Ministry of Magic approved and also because I’m starting to think this Prince character was a bit dodgy.

RON
It was a laugh Hermione, that’s all. Calm down. You just don’t like the Prince because he’s better than you in Potions…

Hermione
It’s got nothing to do with that! I just think it’s very irresponsible to start performing spells when you don’t even know what they’re for! Half Blood Prince, I bet it’s just a stupid nickname, and it doesn’t seem as though he’s a very nice person to me!

HARRY
Hermione if he’d been a budding Death Eater he wouldn’t have been boasting about being ‘half-blood’ would he?

HERMIONE
The Death Eaters can’t all be pure blood, and I bet it’s only Muggle-borns they hate, they’d be quite happy to let you and Ron join up!

RON
There’s no way they’d let me be a Death Eater, my whole family are blood traitors! That’s as bad as Muggle-borns to them!

HARRY
And they’d love to have me; we’d be best pals if they didn’t keep trying to do me in.

Hedwig flies in and lands a large package in front of Harry. Harry opens the pack and it’s a new copy of the Advanced Potion Making book.

HARRY
Thanks Hedwig

HERMIONE
Oh good, now you can give that graffitied copy back.

HARRY
Are you mad? I’m keeping it! I’ll give Slughorn back the new one, he can’t complain.

Hermione frowns and grabs the Daily Prophet and starts to read.

RON
Anyone we know dead?

HERMIONE
No. Oh, look. Your dad’s in here, Ron.

Ron turns to her with a look of panic in his eyes.

HERMIONE
He’s alright! It just says he’s been to visit the Malfoy’s house.

The camera pans to show a shot of the DAILY PROPHET that has a picture of MALFOY MANOR on the front of it.

HERMIONE
This second search of the Death Eater’s residence does not seem to have yielded any results. Arthur Weasley of the Office for the Detection and Confiscation of Counterfeit Defensive Spells and Protective Objects said that his team had been acting upon a confidential tip-off.

HARRY
Yeah, mine. I told him about Malfoy and that thing he’s trying to get Borgin to fix, aswell as that Vanishing Cabinet.

HERMIONE
Oh Harry….

SLUGHORN
Harry m’boy!!

They all look up and coming towards them is Professor Slughorn holding a pinapple and a big smile on his face.

SLUGHORN
Harry, Harry, just the man I was hoping to see! What do you say to a spot of supper tonight in my rooms? We’re having a little party, just a few rising stars, I’ve got McLaggen coming and Zabini. I hope very much that Miss Granger will favor me by coming also!

HARRY
I can’t come, Professor. I’ve got a detention with Professor Snape.

SLUGHORN
Oh dear! Dear, dear, I was counting on you, Harry! Well now, I’ll just have to have a word with Severus and explain the situation. I’m sure I’ll be able to persuade him to postpone your detention. Yes, I’ll see you both later!

He walks away in a hurry and Ron frowns at the fact that he was totally just ignored.

RON
He acted like he didn’t even see me!

HARRY
No worries Ron. He’s got no chance of persuading Snape.

Harry looks up and notices Dumbledore’s empty chair in the front of the Great Hall

HARRY
Have you noticed Dumbledore hasn’t been seen in a while? Last time I saw him was during our lesson.

HERMIONE
Yeah I did notice…maybe he’s out doing things for the Order…

HARRY
Maybe….

The camera shows a shot of Dumbledore’s empty chair and slowly fades to Harry, Ron, and Hermione walking down a corridor towards a class. Cormac McLaggen is seen coming towards them in a hurry. He bumps into Ron as he approaches Harry.

CORMAC
Harry! We met on the train, in old Sluggy’s compartment, Cormac McLaggen, Keeper.

HARRY
Ok…..

CORMAC
Just wanted to have a word before Quidditch tryouts later today. I’m sure you’ll find I’m the best Keeper you’ll find this year.

He makes a slight glance over at Ron who is staring at him angrily

HARRY
Yeah well I judge that for myself out on the field.

CORMAC
You’ll go wrong not to pick me Potter.

He gives a slight smile and walks away from them with his head held high.

RON
Who the bloody hell does he think he is? You’re not going to let him on the team are you?

HARRY
I have to be fair Ron….

SNAPE
(Off screen)
Potter….

Harry, Ron, and Hermione turn around and see walking slowly towards them Snape.

SNAPE
You are to be in my office at half past eight tonight to do your detention Potter. No matter how many party invitations you have received.

He looks down at Harry and then proceeds to walk away.

RON
Well…I guess that’s a no to the party then…..

Harry watches as Snape continues to walk down the hall and clouds slowly cover the screen and them

EXT. QUIDDITCH STADIUM-Later that Day

SWOOSH Ginny flies by quickly on her broom holding a QUAFFLE as the scene cuts to the Quidditch Tryouts. She ducks as a BLUDGER almost hits her. She is flying towards McLaggen who is guarding one of the GOAL POSTS. There is a shot of Harry who is hovering above and looks impressed at Ginny’s skills. He glances over at Ron who is in front of the opposite goal post and who looks very nervous.

Another bludger heads towards Ginny and SMACK Dean intercepts knocking it away. There are cheers in the audience and the camera cuts to show a crowd of people in the stands and we see Hermione sitting in the midst looking nervous. Ginny approaches McLaggen and throws the Quaffle but BOOM he knocks it out of way. He gives a smile at Ginny who frowns as she turns around.

HARRY
Alright the score is now tied. The next Keeper who can’t block Ginnys or Katies Quaffle won’t make the team.

He blows his whistle and Katie is off speeding towards Ron who looks even greener than he did before. Once again we cut back to the audience and show Lavender.

LAVENDER
Let’s go Ron!! You got it!!

Hermione glances over at her with a look of disgust in her eyes. Katie dodges the bludger and SWISH tosses the Quaffle to Ginny who immediately throws it at Ron. Ron flies up quickly and with a quick turn of his broom BAM knocks the Quaffle away and the crowd roars. Harry gives a sigh of relief as Katie and Ginny both take the Quaffle to the other side again. Prepared McLaggen waits and as Ginny throws the Quaffle McLaggen veers off in the other direction and DING the score is made. Harry blows his whistle and all the Quidditch players land their brooms on the field.

HARRY
Due to the fact that McLaggen only saved 4 and Ron saved 5 I think it’s only fair to award Ron the position of Keeper.

McLaggen lands his broom and storms up quickly towards Harry. He is clearly angry.

CORMAC
His sister didn’t really try. She gave him an easy save!

HARRY
Rubbish! You know just as well as I that it was a fair save.

CORMAC
Give me another go!

HARRY
No. Now if you don’t mind, get out of my face.

Cormac looks as if he wants to hit Harry but storms off. Harry smiles as he turns around and his new teams is smiling back at him.

HARRY
Well it was a great tryout and I think this is a solid team. So congratulations everyone and I’ll see you at practice next week.

Everyone begins to leave and Harry runs towards Ginny who is taking off her gloves.

HARRY
When did you get so good Ginny? That was really impressive.

GINNY
When you grow up with as many brothers as I did you learn a few tricks.

He smiles but Dean comes up and puts his arm around Ginny and Harry’s smile fades.

DEAN
Great tryouts Harry.

HARRY
Yeah…you did fine yourself Dean.

DEAN
Thanks…Ginny you ready to get out of here?

GINNY
Yeah….see ya later Harry.

She waves at him and watches as Ginny and Dean walk away hand and hand. Ron comes up behind Harry excited and hits him in his arm.

RON
I did alright didn’t I?

HARRY
Yeah and good thing to. Now I don’t have to deal with that McLaggen.

RON
Did you see him lumbering off in the wrong direction on his fifth? Looked like he’d been Confunded…..

HARRY
You’re right…..

RON
(Excited)
Hermione!

Hermione is walking towards them but is cut off as Lavender and PERVATI PATIL run past her and approach Ron.

LAVENDER
You were amazing Ron…

RON
Oh…thanks Lavender.

LAVEDER
Hey I was wondering if you could…you know…help me carry my books to the common room. You see they’re really heavy….

RON
Oh…um…sure why not?

He takes Lavenders books and they begin to walk off. Lavender turns and gives a wink at Pervati who giggles and walks away. Hermione clearly upset walks up behind Harry.

HERMIONE
What was that about?

HARRY
I guess Lavender’s books were too heavy….

HERMIONE
That’s likely….

HARRY
Something that is highly unlikely is how it seemed McLaggen was confounded during that last shot….

Harry glances over at Hermione who looks away with a look of shame on her face.

HARRY
Hermione….

HERMIONE
All right I did it…but I did it for the good of the team! He’s got a nasty temper, you saw how he reacted when he didn’t get in…you wouldn’t have wanted someone like that on the team.

HARRY
Hermione you sneaky devil you….

HERMIONE
Yes well I think the real sneaky devil is that Lavender Brown.

She walks off angrily as Harry looks over and see a group of girls giggling and waving at him. Romilda Vane is in this group and she blows a kiss at Harry. Harry does a nervous chuckle as the scene slowly fades to a shot of Hogwarts now during the winter. We get a sweeping shot of the school and the camera pans to show Harry and Ron walking in the snow towards HAGRIDS HUT. They knock on the door and HAGRID opens and lets them in.

EXT. OUTSIDE HAGRIDS HUT MOMENTS LATER

HAGRID
Thanks for comin’ down you two….

The camera shows a barrel full of what looked like foot long maggots, that are slimy, white, and writhing sitting on the table.

RON
What the bloody hell are those Hagrid?

HAGRID
Nothing to worry bout….Jus’ giant grubs

RON
And they grow into…?

HAGRID
They won’ grow inter nuthin’, I got em ter feed Aragog

Hagrid pauses and then he begins to cry. He takes an old towel and blows his nose with it.

HARRY
Hagrid…what’s….

HAGRID
It’s…him….Aragog…I think he’s dyin…I don’t know what I’ll do if he…if he….We’ve bin tergether so long…

RON
Wait Aragog? You mean that big giant spider that sent his kids to kill Harry and me our second year. I say good riddance….

Harry nudges Ron with his elbow and he goes silent as Hagrid continues to weep.

HARRY
Hagrid I….is there anything we can do?

HAGRID
I don’ think so Harry, see the rest o’ the tribe, Aragog’s family…they’re getting a bit funny now he’s ill…bit restive…

RON
Yeah, I think we saw a bit of that side of them

HAGRID
I don’t reckon it’d be safe fer anyone but me ter go near the colony at the mo But thanks fer offerin, it means a lot…

Hagrid blows his nose again and the scene cuts to the court yard where a group of students are waiting to go to HOGSMEADE. FILCH is searching the students with his SECRECY SENSOR before they can exit.

HARRY
What is he doing?

HERMIONE
Checking to make sure there are no dark objects on any of us. They did the same thing when we first came to school. Filch also banned anything from Fred and George’s shop.

RON
Yes but what does it matter if we’re smuggling Dark stuff OUT?

GINNY
Harry…hey I’m supposed to give you this.

She hands him a piece of parchment.

HARRY
Thanks, Ginny. Do you think you’re going to join us in Hogsmeade?

GINNY
I’m going with Dean…might see you there.

She waves and walks away and Harry, disappointed, opens the piece of parchment.

HARRY
It’s from Dumbledore! Our next lesson is Monday!

HERMIONE
So he’s back then? That’s good to hear…

EXT. HOGSMEADE-DAY

The scene cuts to a shot of HOGSMEADE in the distance. We see the various shops and many students happily going in and out of them. There are a few shops that are boarded up however that Harry, Ron, and Hermione notice as they walk slowly down the streets of the town as a few students get into a snowball fight next to them. They notice Tonks looking around and approach her.

TONKS
Wotcher Harry, Ron, and Hermione.

HARRY
Hey Tonks…you alright?

TONKS
I’m okay. Glad to see you three though. Well I have to be off…lots to do. Take care.

She gives a weak smile and walks away.

RON
She looks terrible….

HERMIONE
Ron!

RON
No I mean…look at her clothes and hair...she looks kinda depressed. I saw her once crying to mum…

HERMIONE
Well lets go inside I’m freezing.

INT-HONEYDUKES-MOMENTS LATER

As they walk into Honeydukes they slowly take of their gloves as the hot warm temperature in the room hits them. Harry notices Ginny and Dean sitting having a cup of Butterbear but before he can say something a loud voice yells out to him.

SLUGHORN
Harry m’boy!

HARRY
On no…..

SLUGHORN
Harry, that’s three of my little suppers you’ve missed now! It won’t do, m’boy, I’m determined to have you! Miss Granger loves them, don’t you?

HERMIONE
Yes, they’re really…

SLUGHORN
So why don’t you come along, Harry?

HARRY
Oh...well…you see I have Quidditch practice.

SLUGHORN
Well I certainly expect you to win your first match. Well, how about Monday night?

HARRY
Can’t, I have a meeting with Dumbledore

SLUGHORN
Unlucky again! You can’t evade me forever, Harry! Well see you two later!

He gives a nice wave and walks away clutching his pineapple.

RON
You two? You two! Am I wearing an invisibility cloak or something?

HARRY
Yeah well atleast you don’t have him pestering you about going to some stupid dinners all the time...

We see a shot of Slughorn now talking to McLaggen and the scene slowly fades to…

EXT- OUTSIDE OF HOGSMEADE

Harry, Ron, and Hermione back on their way to school. There are about 4 different groups of students walking. Harry notices Katie walking very slowly and her friend LEANNE is says something to her. Katie looks over at Leanne and frowns.

KATIE
It’s nothing to do with you, Leanne!

Katie clutches the package she is holding tighter to her chest.

LEANNE
Katie stop being a difficult and let me see what it is!

Leanne reaches for the package and it rips as Katie pulls back on it. All at once Katie rises in the air with her arms outstretched with her hair whipping around her by a feirce wind. Her eyes are closed for a moment and then she lets out a terrible scream. Her eyes open and Leanne begins to scream. She runs to Katie and tries to pull her down by her ankles. Harry, Ron, and Hermione run up to help and when they grab her she falls and Harry and Ron catches her. She’s shaking tremendously. They lower her to the ground and she’s thrashing and screaming.

The scene cuts to Hagrid picking Katie up as Ron and Harry watch on and Hermione holds onto Leanne who is still shaking and crying.

HAGRID
It’s ok, I’ll be taking her to the hospital wing.

He walks away as she continues to scream. Ron walks bends down and we see a shot of a ornate opal necklace that’s sticking out of the paper. He reaches down to grab it but Harry grabs his arm.

HARRY
Don’t touch it! I’ve seen this before…remember we saw this on display in Borgin and Burks when we bumped into that shelf. The label said it was cursed… Katie must have touched it.

Harry turns and slowly walks towards Leanne.

HARRY
How did Katie get hold of this?

LEANNE
Well that’s why we were arguing. She came back from the bathroom in the Three Broomsticks holding it, said it was a surprise for somebody at Hogwarts and she had to deliver it. She looked all funny when she….oh no…I bet she’d been Imperiused and I didn’t realize!

HERMIONE
We’d better get up to school.

HARRY
She didn’t say who’d given it to her, Leanne?

LEANNE
No…she wouldn’t tell me.

INT-HOGWARTS-MCGONAGALLS OFFICE-NIGHT

The scene cuts to the Harry, Ron, and Hermione standing in front Professor McGonagalls desk in her office.

MCGONAGALL
So what happened when Katie touched the necklace?

HARRY
She rose up in the air and then began to scream, and collapsed. Professor, can I see Professor Dumbledore, please?

McGONAGALL
The headmaster is away until Monday, Potter.

HARRY
Away?

McGONAGALL
Yes, Potter, away. But anything you have to say about this horrible business can be said to me, I’m sure!

Harry glances over at Ron and Hermione and takes a deep breathe before he speaks.

HARRY
I think Draco Malfoy gave Katie that necklace, Professor.

McGONAGALL
That is a very serious accusation, Potter. Do you have any proof?

HARRY
Well…no…but you must trust me.

McGONAGALL
Potter, you cannot point the finger of blame at Mr. Malfoy, he was not in Hogsmeade today. He was doing detention with me. And it might interest you to know Potter that Mr. Filch has set up Secrecy Sensors all over the school grounds. Any Dark object will be found; even the owls have extra security! Now if that is all, good day to you all!

INT-MOVING STAIRCASE-NIGHT

The scene cuts to them walking up the stairs towards their common room

RON
Who do you think Katie was supposed to give the necklace to?

HERMIONE
Whoever it was has had a narrow escape don’t you think? No one could have opened that package without touching the necklace.

HARRY
It could’ve been meant for loads of people. Dumbledore, Slughorn…I wonder why Malfoy told her to take it into the castle.

HERMIONE
Harry, Malfoy wasn’t in Hogsmeade!

HARRY
He must have used an accomplice then.

RON
(Irritably)
Oh drop it, Harry!

HARRY
Don’t take that tone with me! It’s not my fault Slughorn invited Hermione and me to his stupid party, neither of us wanted to go, you know?

RON
Well, as I’m not invited to any parties, I think I’ll go to bed.

Ron walks ahead of them angrily and Harry sighs.

HERMIONE
Harry you should apologize. I know you’re convinced that Malfoys somehow at fault but he wasn’t there….

HARRY
He is involved Hermione, I know it!

HERMIONE
Harry…just get some rest alright?

Harry nods and Hermione looks at him with worry in her eyes. The scene then cuts to a shot of Hogwarts with the full moon hanging over it.

INT. HOGWARTS-THE ROOM OF REQUIREMENT

The scene then cuts to Ginny standing in front of the mirror in the ROOM OF REQUIREMENT. Harry slowly walks up behind her as she turns around and smiles at him.

GINNY
You’re a good teacher Harry.

HARRY
Ginny?

She looks up and above them a mistletoe is forming.

GINNY
Mistletoe.

Harry has a look of pure confusion on his face. Why does this seem so familiar?

HARRY
Probably full of nargles….

GINNY
What are nargles?

HARRY
No idea….

He slowly goes in to kiss Ginny getting closer and closer….

DUMBLEDORE
(Offscreen)
Harry?

INT. DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-NIGHT

The scene cuts to Harry sitting in Dumbledore’s Office and we now see that he was daydreaming. Dumbledore walks from the room behind his desk slowly.

HARRY
Professor! I’m sorry I came for the lesson and didn’t see you so I decided to wait.

DUMBLEDORE
Did I interrupt a daydream? I’m terribly sorry….

HARRY
No…no…I’m fine….

Dumbledore looks curiously at Harry

DUMBLEDORE
Who is she?

HARRY
Sir?

DUMBLEDORE
(Chuckles)
I may be old but I know the look of a man in love…who is she?

HARRY
Ginny Weasley sir….

DUMBLEDORE
Ah…your best friends sister.

HARRY
Yeah…I guess that is sort of the dilemma. I don’t want Ron to hate me….

DUMBLEDORE
You think he would?

HARRY
Yeah…I mean…I don’t know why I feel this way about her….

DUMBLEDORE
Ah Harry love is cruel. You can’t help who you’re chosen to love sometimes…

Dumbledore slowly picks up his wand and stares at it. A memory seems to cross his mind as he stares distantly at it.

DUMBLEDOER
Love…such a beautiful thing…but sometimes oh so cruel….

HARRY
Sir?

Dumbledore snaps out of his slight trance and looks down at Harry.

DUMBLEDORE
I don’t think you give Mr. Weasley enough credit…I’m sure as long as you’re happy…

HARRY
Yeah well Ron can be a bit harsh when he needs to be. I’m not too worried about it though sir, you see she already has a boyfriend….

DUMBLEDORE
The plot thickens…..

Harry notices that Dumbledore’s hand looks even worse than before. It seems to be spreading as now his most of his fingers are black and withered aswell.

HARRY
Sir where have you been?

DUMBLEDORE
On a little adventure…there’s a lot to do Harry and sadly not enough time to do it.…

He does a slight glance at his hand as he says this and then he proceeds to walk down towards Harry.

DUMBLEDORE
Speaking of time I think it’s about time we get to the source of today’s lesson. Now this next memory you’re about to see Harry is very important…pay close attention.

Harry nods and walks up to the Pensieve. He takes a deep breath and sticks his head down as the room dissolves and we are now standing in Slughorns Office.

INT-SLUGHORNS OFFICE-NIGHT-PAST

Standing there is a much younger Slughorn holding on to a pineapple with a big grin in his face. Standing across from his is a Teenaged TOM RIDDLE in the room with a young Bellatrix, AVERY, ALECTO, and AMYCUS.

SLUGHORN
Thank you for the pineapple Tom, you’re quite right, it is my favorite!

Slughorn looks down at the small golden clock on his desk.

SLUGHORN
Good gracious, is it that time already? You all better get going, or we’ll all be in trouble. Lestrange, I want your essay by tomorrow or it’s detention! Same goes for you, Avery.

They rest of them gather their things and begin to leave. Bellatrix throws a smile at Tom before exiting as Slughorn sorts through paper on his desk. He looks up and notices Tom standing there.

SLUGHORN
Look sharp Tom. You don’t want to be caught out of bed out of hours….

Tom looks down and twists the RING with a BLACK STONE around his finger and looks up at Slughorn.

TOM
Sir, I wanted to ask you something.

SLUGHORN
Ask away, then, m’boy, ask away…

TOM
Sir, I wondered what you know about….about Horcruxes?

The room all of a sudden feels with a dense fog until nothing can be seen except Harry and we hear a loud booming voice shout out:

SLUGHORN
(Offscreen)
I don’t know anything about Horcruxes and I wouldn’t tell you if I did! Now get out of here at once and don’t let me catch you mentioning them again.

The room then slowly dissolves and we are back in Dumbledore’s Office

INT. DUMBLEDORE’S OFFICE-MOMENTS LATER

DUMBLEDORE
So what did you think?

HARRY
That seemed really odd sir….was that memory…?

DUMBLEDORE
Tampered with? Indeed Harry.

HARRY
But why would Slughorn….

DUMBLEDORE
I think he is ashamed of what he remembers Harry. So I think it’s time for me to give you your first homework assignment. It will be your job to persuade Professor Slughorn to divulge the real memory, which will undoubtedly be our most crucial piece of information of all. How important, we will only know when we have seen the real thing. So good luck….and good night….

HERMIONE
(Offscreen)
Horcruxes…

INT. HOGWARTS-CORRIDOR-NEXT DAY

HERMIONE
I’ve never even heard of them…they must be really advanced Dark Magic, or why would Voldemort have wanted to know about them? It’s going to be difficult to get the information from him Harry, you should think out a strategy.

Harry, Ron, and Hermione are walking down the hallways after a class. Harry notices Draco who looks a little pale down the hall. He looks back and then turns out of the main hall.

HARRY
Draco hasn’t been himself lately…

RON
Seems like the same git to me and speaking of gits….

McLaggen walks towards them but doesn’t look at Ron or Harry just Hermione.

CORMAC
So did you enjoy ole Sluggy’s last party?

HERMIONE
Um…yeah it was ok….

CORMAC
Potter and Weasley here must know that he only invites the best…even though some let extremely lucky people get on their teams….

HARRY
You got something to say?

CORMAC
I think I’ve said all I needed too. See ya around Hermione….

He smiles and walks away with a look of satisfaction on his face.

RON
Who does he think he is? Just because you’re invited to some…stupid party..doesn’t make you better than everyone else….

HERMIONE
Just ignore him Ron…

RON
You’re one to talk! Seems like you two really hit it off to me. How was Slughorn’s latest party?

HERMIONE
It was quite fun actually. I mean he drones on about famouse ex pupils a bit, and he absolutely fawns over McLaggen because he’s so well connected, but it was really nice.

RON
Oh yeah such a great thing to spend an evening with McLaggen huh Hermione.

Hermione shoots a look at Ron and rolls her eyes.

HERMIONE
Anyways, he’s going to have a Christmas party and Harry there’s no way to wiggle out of this one because he actually asked me to check your free evenings, so he could be sure to have it on a night you could come.

HARRY
Excellent, thanks Hermione

RON
And this is another party just for Slughorns favorites, isn’t it?

HERMIONE
The Slug Club, yes.

RON
Slug Club! That’s pathetic. Well I hope you enjoy the party Hermione, why don’t you try hooking up with McLaggen, you guys could be King and Queen Slug.

HERMIONE
Well we are allowed to bring guests and I was going to ask you to come, but if you think its stupid then I won’t bother.

Ron looks a bit shocked and a slight blush comes over his face.

RON
You…. were going to ask me?

HERMIONE
Yes, but obviously if you’d rather I hooked up with McLaggen

RON
No...what I meant was…

HERMIONE
Well I’m off to the library to see if I can find anything on Horcruxes. Maybe going to the Christmas party will butter Slughorn up a bit Harry.

HARRY
Maybe….

She walks away and Ron and Harry keep walking and turn down another hall that is basically empty

RON
Was she serious? Do you think she was serious? Or was she just…you know…

HARRY
Oh Ron, you act like you actually want to go to Slughorns party.

RON
Oh…me...no…I mean…unless she asked me of course. But then I’ll be going just to be a good friend, not that I’ll enjoy it or anything.

HARRY
(Laughing)
You’re pathetic

They turn another corner and see Ginny and Dean kissing.

RON
What the…

Dean and Ginny both stop kissing and look up. Dean looks embarrassed but Ginny seems a little annoyed.

GINNY
What?

RON
I don’t want to find my own sister snogging people in public.

GINNY
It was an empty corridor until you showed up!

DEAN
C’mon Ginny lets go…

GINNY
Stop telling me what to do Dean! You go, I want a word with my dear brother!

Dean gives a weak smile at Harry and Ron and leaves. Ginny walks up to Ron furious.

GINNY
Lets get this straight once and for all. It is none of your business who I go out with or what I do with them, Ron…

RON
Yeah, it is! D’you think I want people saying my sister’s a…

GINNY
A what exactly?

HARRY
He doesn’t mean anything, Ginny…

GINNY
Oh yes he does! Just because he’s never snogged anyone in his life, just because the best kiss he’s ever had is from our Auntie Muriel…

RON
Shut your mouth!

GINNY
No, I will not! If you went out and got a bit of snogging done yourself, you wouldn’t mind so much that everyone else does it!

Ron pulls his wand out and Harry quickly jumps between the two of them.

RON
You don’t know what you’re talking about! Just because I don’t do it in public!!

GINNY
Oh come off it Ron! Or have you got a picture of Auntie Muriel stashed under your pillow?

A streak of orange light flies from his wand and BANG! It hits the wall beside Ginny’s head. Harry quickly takes Ron by his robes and pins him up against the wall.

HARRY
Don’t be stupid…

GINNY
Harry’s snogged Cho Chang and Hermione snogged Victor Krum, it’s only you who acts like it’s something disgusting, Ron, and that’s because you’ve got as much experience of a six year old!

She turns around and storms off. Harry lets go of Ron who straightens him robes and puts his wand away.

RON
Who does she think she is?

HARRY
Ron calm down….

They begin to continue walking down the corridor and enter into the courtyard.

RON
I’ll have to teach her a few manners…..

Ron pauses as he notices Hermione talking to McLaggen in the distance.

RON
I thought she was supposed to be in the library?

A look of anger and pain crosses over Ron’s face. He turns around and storms off. Harry looks back at Hermione who pulls out her wand and blasts McLaggen across the courtyard. She notices him and runs over.

HARRY
You ok?

HERMIONE
Yeah…I was on the way to the library and McLaggen cornered me again. Where’s Ron?

INT-GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-NIGHT (SAME DAY)

The scene cuts to Harry walking into the common room which is a bit crowded. He notices Ginny and approaches her.

HARRY
Hey Ginny. Have you seen?

GINNY
Looking for Ron? He’s over there, the filthy hypocrite.

Harry looks at notice that Ron and Lavender Brown are sitting in a chair kissing heavily

GINNY
It looks like he’s eating her face, but I suppose he’s got to refine his technique somehow huh?

Harry looks at Ron in amazement and Ginny walks off to join Dean. At this moment Hermione walks into the room and pauses as she notices Ron and Lavender kissing. She pauses for a second before she turns and walks out. Harry runs after her.

INT-CLASSROOM-NIGHT (MOMENTS LATER)

Harry walks into the classroom where Hermione is sitting alone. She has a small ring of yellow birds circling her head.

HARRY
Hermione?

HERMIONE
Oh, hello Harry. I was just practicing.

HARRY
They’re really good.

HERMIONE
Ron seems to be enjoying himself….

HARRY
Does he?

HERMIONE
Don’t pretend you didn’t see him. He wasn’t exactly hiding it was he?

HARRY
Hermione….

Before he could finish his statement the door opens and Ron and Lavender run in holding hands and laughing.

RON
Oh….

LAVENDER
Oops

She laughs, kisses Ron, and backs out of the room slowly closing the door behind her. There is an awkward silence. Hermione is staring at Ron who is just looking at Harry.

RON
Hi, Harry! Wondered where you’d got to!

HERMIONE
Well Ron? Is there something you have to tell me?

RON
I don’t have to explain anything to you. Why don’t you run off with your dear sweet McLaggen.

HARRY
Ron….

Hermione stands up suddenly looking the angriest she’s looked in a long time. The birds start to circle around her head faster now.

HERMIONE
You shouldn’t leave Lavender waiting outside.

RON
Yeah…well…I won’t….

HERMIONE
Good…..Oppugno!!!

She points her wand at Ron and the birds all sped towards Ron and start pecking and clawing at him. He starts to scream and try and get them out of his face. He runs out of the room and past Lavender who shoots Hermione an angry look before running after them. Hermione smiles a little and walks away from Harry who has a look of shock on his face. The scene cuts to

INT-THE GREAT HALL-DAY

Ron and Harry sitting in the Great Hall. Harry is reading his Potions book. While Ron is talking its clear that Harry is ignoring him.

RON
I never promised Hermione anything. I mean, alright, I was going to go to Slughorns Christmas party with her, but just as friends…until she decides to run off after McLaggen.

HARRY
Ron I told you he cornered her…

RON
Hey who’s side are you on?

INT-GREAT HALL-LATER THAT DAY

Harry sighs and continues to read the book as the camera pans over and now it’s just Harry and Hermione sitting in the Great Hall.

HERMIONE
He’s at perfect liberty to kiss whomever he likes! I really couldn’t care less.

She starts to write something furiously on the parchment in front of her.

INT. POTIONS CLASS (DAY)/GREAT HALL(AFTERNOON)/CORRIDOR(NIGHT)

The scene cuts to them in Potions class and as Slughorn paces the room Ron raises his hand mocking Hermione while Lavender laughs on. Hermione gets up and walks out of the room furiously. The scene then cuts to Ron and Lavender walking down the hall holding hands and we see Hermione standing the corner watching. She points her wand and dozens of SPIDERS appear on Ron who starts to Panic and run around helplessly. Hermione smiles and walks off and the scene slowly fades to

Harry walking down the hallway himself reading his potions book. BAM he walks into Ginny who just came from around the corner.

HARRY
Ginny…sorry…I was reading….

GINNY
That book has to have dark magic to it if you’re actually reading it.

HARRY
It’s just interesting…some of the things the Prince has to say.

GINNY
Well I’m on my way to the Common Room do you mind the company.

HARRY
No not at all!

GINNY
So Ron and Hermione….

HARRY
Not talking and it’s driving me mad. They keep trying to get revenge on each other so I’m staying out of it.

GINNY
Well Harry, you need to be careful. There are a lot of girls out to get you.

HARRY
Oh Ginny what would Dean say?

GINNY
(Laughs)
I’m talking about Romilda Vane. I was in the girl’s bathroom just before I came here and I overheard her talking to her friends. They’re hoping you’re going to take them to Slughorn’s party, and they all seem to have bought Fred and George’s love potions. I’d just invite someone to go with if I were you.

HARRY
There isn’t anyone I want to invite except…..

He looks over at Ginny but clears his throat and looks straight ahead again.

GINNY
Well just be careful what you drink.

INT-MOVING STAIRWAY-SECONDS LATER

They walk up the staircases and Harry see’s Hermione running towards him holding a piece of parchment.

HERMIONE
Hi Ginny, Harry…listen I’ve found something that might be of some interest.

GINNY
You two talk…I’ll see you around…

She waves and walks ahead and Harry sighs and follows Hermione into a hallway.

HARRY
What is it did you find something on Horcruxes?

HERMIONE
That’s exactly it; I can’t find anything on it. I’ve been right through the restricted section and even the most horrible books have nothing. All I could find was this. It was in the introduction to Magik Moste Evile. Of the Horcrux, wickedest of magical inventions, we shall not speak nor give direction…

HARRY
Well why put in there at all?

HERMIONE
Well Slughorn’s party is coming up so I’m sure you can get a word in there.

They begin to walk again towards the common room.

HARRY
Hang on, Ginny just told me girls have snuck love potions into the school. I thought Filch banned anything bought at Weasleys’ Wizard Wheezes? How come these girls are able to bring love potions into school?

HERMIONE
Fred and George send them disguised as perfumes and cough potions.

HARRY
So if these girls are getting stuff into the school disguised as something else, why wouldn’t Malfoy have…?

HERMIONE
Oh Harry please, not that again. Secrecy Sensors detect jinxes, curses, and concealment charms. They’re used to find Dark Magic and Dark objects. Love potions aren’t Dark or dangerous…

HARRY
Easy for you to say…

INT. GRYFFINDOR COMMON ROOM-MOMENTS LATER

They walk into the common room and immediately Romilda Vane runs towards Harry holdings a few items.

ROMILDA
Hi Harry! Fancy a gillywater?

HARRY
No thanks; I don’t like it much.

ROMILDA
Well, take these anyway

She thrusts a box into his hands of candy into his hands.

ROMILDA
Chocolate Cauldrons, they’ve got firewhisky in them. My gran sent them to me, but I don’t like them.

HARRY
Oh, thanks a lot.

Romilda smiles and walks back to her group of giggling friends

HERMIONE
Pathetic what some girls would do for a boy.


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hmmm..I guess no one has anything to say for that one huh

Well I just wanted to say I made an error or sorts. There's something I wanted to do earlier but I completly forgot but I'll figure out a way to work in it. I will possibly be adding the next section on tonight hopefully..just curious on what people think about the last section before I move on so come on people


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