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Old April 20th, 2008, 3:22 pm
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Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

Ok...feel free to post away If you like! But, please do!



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Old April 20th, 2008, 4:15 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

I like the new arrangement of the text in the beginning.

It make sense to me that Isolath loathes eronnine, oh yes iŽd do that if somebody i care for chose death.

Anyway do we have to announce if we want to be next? What happens when two people work on the same chapter?


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Old April 20th, 2008, 4:19 pm
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I don't know, Sec! Erm...we'll have to challenge ginny about that one! Yes, I would loathe someone I care for, too. That's if they chose death, of course!
Announccements sound like a good idea, though...

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I look at all my university stuff and think I am going to write chapter 22


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Old April 20th, 2008, 4:33 pm
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Whaaat? Does that mean you're piled high with university work or something?

lol chapter 22 is almost the end of it>>> in fact, that is one of the best chapters!



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Old April 20th, 2008, 6:59 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

That prologue is amazing, Dandini!

Shoot, though! I keep walking in on these things too late. I'll have to participate in the next it's OK story.


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Old April 20th, 2008, 7:21 pm
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That prologue is amazing, Dandini!

WHAT? *looks surprised* THANK YOU SO MUCH! I people like you who say nice things to thirteen year olds like me! Stay and review! lol joke, you can go if you wanna! Man, the other's are gonna love you if you keep reviewing like that!

But seriously, that means alot. A

ND you can join the story too, all you have to do is go to the IT'S ok to be bored thread and just announce that your joining in, really! Anyone can come on in if they're serious about this thing, and if they've said on the I.O.T.B.B thread! When you feel like writing a chapter (follow the story summary) just write it and owl it to moi!


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Old April 21st, 2008, 1:53 am
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Man, the other's are gonna love you if you keep reviewing like that!
Thanks! I'm usually a whole lot harsher than that. I'm in High School, all my friends write, and since I've been writing longest and best (Their words, not mine) I've become their editor. I've become extremely good at constructive criticism.

Seriously, though. Your prologue was extremely well written and drawing. It could be better (No matter what it is, it can always be better), but I enjoyed it and will be looking forward to the rest of this story. It will be interesting to see how well this widespread of a "round robin" story goes.


And I just might take you up on a chapter.


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Old April 21st, 2008, 4:17 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

Great prologue Paige,
I'd like to write for this story too! I still think you're idea was brilliant
How do we deside who writes the next chapter though? And how do we know what's supposed to happen in the next chapter? I suppose you have a plan, what if we screw it up?


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Great prologue Paige,
I'd like to write for this story too! I still think you're idea was brilliant
How do we deside who writes the next chapter though? And how do we know what's supposed to happen in the next chapter? I suppose you have a plan, what if we screw it up?
You will not screw it up, trust me! I'm the editor, so I can just delete something is it 'screws up' which I'm sure it will not!

Just write a chapter and owl it to me, I htink! You'll have to ask ginny!


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Old April 21st, 2008, 8:51 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

I haven't gone to reading it yet, but I will soon! I've just come around to tell everyone that if they have any questions at all, go to the It's OK to be Bored thread, it's in my signature!


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I haven't gone to reading it yet, but I will soon! I've just come around to tell everyone that if they have any questions at all, go to the It's OK to be Bored thread, it's in my signature!
Okies!

btw, hope the info on characters helped y'all!

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Old April 27th, 2008, 9:27 am
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OK I'm not sure, but I think Nora's writing the first chapter, apparently it just needs to be typed out!

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Old April 28th, 2008, 9:55 am
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OK I'm not sure, but I think Nora's writing the first chapter, apparently it just needs to be typed out!

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Just owled it to you, hope you like it !


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Old April 29th, 2008, 5:35 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

am i on the wright page ??? is this the thora jinks or indroronel
well, it does not matter.
commemnts ,yes ,feedback , that would be a good place to start.

ok,
from the bit i have read( which you have shown me today i would love to get the whole picture is seems intresting +++ i love the pic which you draw ,you did it perfectly ( as you always do) but yes ,keep me posted
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Old April 29th, 2008, 5:40 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

Jess, you're so mad! This is Indoronel dear it sez it at the top, love love you really!

Have you read the prologue of Indoronel because if you have review that. If you've read ma new chappie in Thora J go to the Thora feedback thread! God, ur a mental!

I'll see you tomorow at school! Leo has a girlfriend!

Another one rides the bus!


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COLOR="Magenta"]ok just read the ,what ever ya call it.progulage, well ya get the point

good points
good opening the poem i remember you showing me it on that piece of paper after english.very good i describes him very well you get a very evil impression from the poem
over all very good
my fav scene is the bit withthe mother ,well thats the only scene,but still you get a good fell of what there personallitys look like best wrting of what you have written. A*

bad points
i have tomato soup all over my school shirt, but no not very improvements which you could improve because i thought it was extremely good. can wait to read some more

jess xxxx[/color]

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COLOR="Magenta"]ok just read the ,what ever ya call it.progulage, well ya get the point

good points
good opening the poem i remember you showing me it on that piece of paper after english.very good i describes him very well you get a very evil impression from the poem
over all very good
my fav scene is the bit withthe mother ,well thats the only scene,but still you get a good fell of what there personallitys look like best wrting of what you have written. A*

bad points
i have tomato soup all over my school shirt, but no not very improvements which you could improve because i thought it was extremely good. can wait to read some more

jess xxxx[/color]

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You're so sloppy! At least you're wearing the blue shirt, hu? I prefer th white ones myself...I'm mad like that

Thanks for the lurvely feedback, you'll just have to wait for Nora to post because I've read and edited her chapter. It's very gooood :nod:

EBAY! LOL



EDIT: HI NORA! EXCELLENT CHAPTER, WELL YOU KNOW WHAT I THOUGHT OF IT ANYWAY Woah what's with the capitals! Well...as to whos writing it next, I have a chapter ready but I suppose I should let someone step in, huh?

It's from Kara's point of view though, so maybe that's for chapter three. Because Rowan has a party!

Nora, would u like me to owl you the chapter I've had for a while that's ready?


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Old April 29th, 2008, 6:46 pm
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Re: Feedback - Indoronel *from the writers of It's OK to be bored!*

yes I would love to read it paige
as for the next chapter. Yes Rowan's got a party, I just thought that would be fun to write. And of course he still has to find out more about his sister. But we'll just leave all that for the next writer to work it out


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Aye, sounds like a pretty goood idea


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